Here There Be Dragons - 8

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Quick recap: Jot and Chance have decided to bring Ryder along with them as their guide to the kingdom Rale. Ryder's told them that he knows where they can obtain some horses, and so they set off.

Here There Be Dragons

Chapter Five, part one

It turned out that, to get these horses, we were going to have to visit a lonely little farmhouse on the outskirts of the village’s boundaries. Ryder had regained most of his assured, swaggering manner in the short time it took to walk to the place, and he bragged aloud to Chance, “Oh yes, Daria is a fine lady indeed! And I know her very well.” Then he winked knowingly and laughed.
I was riding invisibly in Chance’s pack once again, and I sighed. “All it takes is one gulp,” I whispered.
“I cannot break our promise,” he replied softly, as Ryder continued on about the fine qualities of the lady.
“You wouldn’t be breaking any promises. I would, but it doesn’t matter to me because I’m a dragon, not a knight who’s bound by silly codes of chivalry.”
Chance didn’t respond; he didn’t have time to, as we had arrived at the farmhouse. Ryder was already knocking on the door. It was small, old, and rickety, and the stable on the side of the house didn’t look much better.
“I hope the horses are as good as Ryder says,” I whispered, peeking over his shoulder, and at that minute the door opened.
I’ll never forget that moment; I saw Chance’s eyes widen considerably in surprise, and then a wave of blood rushed into his cheeks before he dropped his gaze to his boots.
My own gaze was then naturally turned towards the door, wondering just what could have caused such a reaction from Chance.
A young woman stood there, maybe a year or so younger than Chance, with light brown hair, sparkling green eyes, and a snub little nose that I bet Chance just found adorable. She looked inquisitively from Chance to Ryder, and I felt the boy’s heart speeding up. I chuckled quietly to myself. This was going to be an interesting time.
“Is the good lady Daria here?” Ryder was inquiring of the girl, whom I had originally assumed was Daria herself.
But the girl nodded and said, “Yes, she’s inside. I’ll get her.”
The door closed, and I felt Chance relax suddenly.
Ooh, she’s a pretty one,” I said with a dreamy sigh. “What’s her name, Ryder?”
“Don’t know,” he replied with a shrug. “Haven’t seen her before.” He eyed Chance sideways and a knowing smile spread across his mouth. “She is a pretty little thing.”
Chance was blushing like an idiot, and he had just hissed the words, “Shut up, both of you,” before the door opened again. He started, face flushing again in anticipation of the girl.
This time, however, the formidable Daria was standing in front of us. She was a good deal taller than Ryder, and had a very strong look about her. Her attired was different from the usual rags; she wore tight leather breeches and a matching leather tunic over a cloth shirt. Her arms and legs were toned perfectly, and I started to salivate at the thought of the wonderful muscles underneath. Her hair was long and shining brown, her eyes flashed a brilliant blue, and her mouth was clenched in a firm way.
Altogether, I bet she could have taken on both Chance and Ryder and sent them crying back home without blinking an eye.
“Ryder.” Her voice was deep, steady, clear. Definitely the strong type. “What are you doing here?” Judging by her tone, she had about as high of an opinion of him as I did.
“Ah, Daria.” Ryder seemed to have lost some of his confidence. “We are here to rent your horses for a journey to Rale.”
Daria turned her gaze to Chance, and for the first time I felt like hiding back in the pack; I dared not move now, or else she’d notice the pack’s flap sliding around on its own, so I kept still. Her eyes seemed to see right through me, as if she knew I was there. Finally, she turned her attention back to Ryder.
“And you expect me to just lend you my horses, not knowing if I’ll ever get them back?”
“Well—”
“What happened the last time I did that? I never saw them again. And you never paid me sufficiently for their value.”
“You see—”
“I don’t trust you, Ryder. Nor your friend who looks like he’s seen the shock of his life.”
I had to hold in the chuckle.
“Surely we can come to some kind of an agreement—”
“I can pay you,” Chance interrupted, straightening up a little bit.
Daria looked at him down her very straight nose. “Let’s go inside, and we’ll talk,” she finally said.
Without another word, she turned and disappeared inside the house; Ryder followed eagerly, and Chance took a deep breath as he trailed behind. No need to wonder what—who—he was thinking about.
There was a nice little couch at one end of the room we had entered, and Daria gestured to it.
“Sit down.”
Chance did, removing his pack and resting it gently on the floor next to the couch. I peered out; from my viewpoint, there was a table and chair in one corner of the room, a broom in another, and a nice soft rug covering the dirt-packed floor. Another doorway led out of the room, and through this I was sure I heard movement coming through.
“Now,” Daria said, pulling the chair over and positioning it at an angle facing Ryder and Chance, “let’s hear your proposition.”
Chance quickly spoke, to prevent Ryder from doing so. “M’lady, I am Chance of the Woles, and I am here on urgent business. I must get to Rale as soon as possible; my associate, Ryder, said he knew of a place where I could acquire steeds suited to my purpose. I can only hope that they will be swift enough. I have eight silvers—” here I glanced up at him in surprise; where the money had suddenly sprung from, I hadn’t a clue, “—which should be enough for the rental of your horses.”
Daria didn’t let anything slip past her. “Show me this money.”
Chance reached into his belt; there was a clever little seam on it that had missed my sight before, and out of it he brought eight shining coins that he held in the palm of his hand.
Daria reached out and took one, gingerly. She inspected it closely, sniffed it, and then returned it to Chance’s palm.
“Eight silvers would pay for one of my horses. Certainly not two, and certainly not when one of the riders is…” she paused, “Ryder.”
“Your lack of trust in me is disappointing,” Ryder sighed.
“But rightfully given,” Daria replied archly. She looked thoughtfully at Chance. “Do you have anything else to offer? Do you even need this man to accompany you? I will easily give you one horse to use for those eight coins.”
Chance shook his head. “I will not be able to pay that much for another horse, and yet I do need one. Ryder is my guide to Rale.”
Daria shot Ryder a glance, halfway between surprise and disgust. “Then we seem to have come to an impasse,” she declared.
Chance looked beseechingly at Ryder. “You don’t happen to have any money, I suppose?”
“Of course not! And I wouldn’t pay for my horse anyway if I did. You’re the one who’s paying me,” he added huffily.
Daria eyed Ryder distastefully, then turned to Chance. “I have a proposition,” she said firmly. “If you choose not to take it and not to rent a horse, then I will ask you to leave.”
“I’m listening,” Chance said, leaning forward as if her words would come faster if there was less space between him and her mouth.
“Let me accompany you. That way, I can personally assure the safety, wellbeing, and return,” she shot Ryder a dirty look, “of my horses. Your eight silvers would get you the two horses for you both, then.”
Chance mulled it over, then nodded. “I’d be fine with that.”
I almost poked my head out at that time to berate Chance for not consulting me first, but was able to hold it in and wait for a more private moment. Instead, I sulkily watched.
Ryder had a very hopeful, yet cautious, expression on his face as Daria glared at him. “And I will have you punished if your conduct fails to meet my approval,” she hissed.
He merely looked affronted.
Chance cleared his throat. “I’d like to see the horses now.”
“Of course,” Daria murmured, rising elegantly. “This way, please.”
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My daughter - So pleased to see this. I'm at work and must hurry but I wanted to comment.

In itself, not much happens in this chapter. It feels more like a transitional one. And that's ok. Except there wasn't much Jot-Wit or anything else happening. I missed Jot ;)

That being said, it was very well written, I very much enjoyed it. I'm intrigued by this young woman that Chance took a fancy to, as well as Daria. She seems like a good strong type, a very interesting character.

Overall, not much happened but I very much enjoyed.
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No sarcasm? I guess this is your way to change the plot from one setting to another. Very idealistic. It seems Chance is building up a party; very ideal in these types of tales. I wonder if the girl who answered the door will end up tagging along? (; Hopefully so, considering the effect she had on Chance, haha! But, nicely done for the transition. Don't leave us hanging now!

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WOOHOO! Another one! (I was going to nag you about this the day before yesterday, but figured you'd be too stressed over your SATs to really appreciate that...)

Okay, so first of all: I just loved that part where Jot and Ryder ganged up on poor Chase when he blushed over that pretty girl. That was cute. And evil at the same time. But more cute.

and I felt the boy’s heart speeding up.

That felt a little strange to me. Did Jot feel it through the rucksack? It just stood out to me as a little strange, is all.

Her attired was

Attire?

And nooo, RH! You're splitting them into parts again! I thought I seemed to have finished reading this in no time. ): Well, I hope you post more soon. I don't really have much to say, other than Daria seems like a good, strong character. Although we haven't really seen that much so far. I expect Chance's fancy girl to be tagging along, and, you know, providing some romance. ;] And I have to agree that this didn't feel as humorous as it usually does, but since Jot didn't really have much of a chance to talk, that's okay... (: The last chapter was still my favourite, though... ;]

Post the next part soon! ...Please?

I look forward to it. <3
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SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!! So sowwy it took me so long to review!! I'll make it up to you!
Betcha you wanna know how, eh?
I'm going to review for you, of course :D What more can you ask for? 8) he he

All righty, done reading. No nit-picks. Yay :) !!

But as everyone else mentioned, there's a lot less humour in these past chapters than at the beginning. Not that there's anything wrong with them, it's just that the first chapters were soooo packed with humour that now these ones seem as though they're missing something. You know what I mean? Like, ya knooow..what I mean? 8)

Anyhoo, that's all I gotta say. Seems to me your chapters never require big reviews; I feel pretty useless XD ha ha. But I guess that's a good thing ;)
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Daughter, you could ask Aunt Spit to post another chapter, that is how she could be forgiven ;)

*And no, I'm not saying this so I could read her work, because she never EVER lets me in on what's going to happen.*

*And no, I do NOT have issues about that.*

*None at all*

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Ooh...this is a good plan, Mum. :twisted:
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And so it came to pass, on the twentieth day of May in the year of our Lord two thousand and eleven, that the Gila Munster returned to her couch with her laptop and reviewed yet another chapter of Clockie's fantastic novel.

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I'm running out of innovative ways to start these reviews I'm giving you. -.-

Good chapter, my dear! Like other people have said, there's not as much humor in it, but that actually didn't bother me at all. The tone still felt consistent, and I was so engrossed in what was happening that I didn't really notice the lack of humor until I read the other reviews. I feel like the novel is nearing the end of the beginning and pretty soon the actual plot is going to start, which is exciting. Not that it hasn't been actual plot until now or anything, it's just that it still sort of feels like intro. Also, I'm intrigued by Daria. She's a handful, but I like her. I foresee an interesting journey with this host of characters.

Though I'm not really looking to do nit-picks just now, there is one typo that stuck out to me:
Her attired was different from the usual rags; she wore tight leather breeches and a matching leather tunic over a cloth shirt.
That should be "attire," right?

I still think Ryder could use to be better-defined. You mention things like him losing his confidence, or Jot not liking him... but you mention them as if I already knew them, and I didn't. Maybe I'm just an extremely unobservant reader (<--highly likely) but I don't really remember reading any decription of Ryder's personality, or being given any good examples of what he's like. Anyhow, I rambled enough about this enough in the last chapter, so I'll hush up now.

I have to say I'm a little confused about the whole Jot-talking-and-making-it-seem-like-he's-Chance thing. Are dragons exceptionally good at mimicking voices, or is Ryder just exceptionally good at being fooled? It's not a big deal, just something that's kind of been bothering me since I can't really imagine anyone pulling it off in real life.

Another thing I don't understand is what's up with the whole money deal. Is eight silver pieces all the money Chance has? I assume it is, since he can't seem to pay any more than that. But if so, why is he spending all his money on horses? Isn't he going to need places to stay and food and stuff like that for the journey ahead? And Chance is nobility, right? Why doesn't he have more money? I'm also a little confused by why he didn't have a horse of his own. Didn't he know that it would be a long way to Rent?

I also wouldn't mind hearing a bit more of what Jot thinks during this whole conversation. I guess it's not necessary, but he just feels a little... removed. He's not thinking of eating anyone (for the most part) and he's just kind of sitting there watching things unravel. Maybe being invisible makes him tired and he doesn't have energy to do much other than sit and listen? Maybe he's genuinely terrified of Daria? I'm not sure what the reason is, but he seems awfully quiet. If you were going to do the multiple POVs thing, this would be a chapter to have from Chance's perspective, methinks. If you were going to do that. *nudge nudge*

Aaaand, I think that's about it for now. I shall be back for the last two as soon as I can. :}



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