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Caerulean · 2011-03-15T15:59:47Z

I feel so ashamed of myself right now. x_x The poem I wrote doesn't deserve to be featured. T_T It was very POORLY written and I'm sorry for that. I hurriedly wrote it last night because YWS was having a free literary work day while I still had to work on my homework. :( That must've been the cause. I seriously am sorry. :( All that I could do was change the poem because it is featured...I hope this is better now. - - - ♥ - - - It’s already late to apologize to you, O country that has been struck and slurred. I’m someone that must really be sued For what I wrote was totally blurred – So blurred that it offends more than it sympathizes, So blurred that it blinds painfully and criticizes, So blurred that it shows something that is far from love, So blurred that is made by this stupid mind I have. But I will apologize and make things correct To the best of my abilities. I’ll take back what I said. Japan, O Japan, I ask for your forgiveness. Japan, please, Japan, forgive my darn sinfulness. Now, I know the reason why I wrote that poem. It’s for me to learn not to use my mind when it roams – When it roams inside the darkness of the night, When it wanders off from the guidance of the light. Japan, O Japan, I feel really ashamed. There’s no one else in this world that can really be blamed For my hideous writing, so dumb and so foul – A writing so darned that it makes people growl. Japan, O Japan, I do really care For you and your people whose world’s been unfair. O distressed nation, take me away from your sight For I have unintentionally spread on you some of my mind’s blight. Japan, O Japan, you deserve mercy more than I do. So trust me that I will say prayers for you – I pray that you will recover from destruction, I pray that we all will learn from our lessons I pray that you will be able to move on And keep in mind that you and your people are strong. Original words (I didn't mean to offend here but that's what happened. :( I was just trying to write from a neutral perspective.): I cannot be sure with how they felt, But I know that they’ll always remember When the land shook like how ice cream melts And when it got drowned by raging water. The machines flourish and the humans decline. The youth waits for their bodies to resign. The work is increasing, the people diminishing. Now, thousands more died, endlessly screaming. Japan is but a country; it is not a continent. But recall the old myth that was sunken undersea. When people abuse things that are heaven sent, The karmic results are what there will be. Maybe, If we’ll J ust A lways P ray A t N ight, Things will finally come to light. Anytime, anywhere, we can learn how to pray. But don’t look at the future. We must look at today.

Gracie

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Wed Mar 16, 2011 11:47 pm

Gracie says... · Wed Mar 16, 2011 11:47 pm

Hi there.
This i really fantastic. I think there have been a few poems and works posted on YWS about Japan but this is easily my favourite.

Firstly, incredibly touching. I could feel emotion and empathy in every stanza.

Secondly, it is wonderfully written. It has a very lyrical quality to it.

So well done, this really deserves to be a featured work.

I can't explain myself, I'm afraid, Sir, because I'm not myself you see.

Alice in Wonderland

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