Monster

This is a short poems, reflecting on the demons of my past. No, I do not mean that this is really what I do, I'm just putting it into poetic format.

A thorn of a rose pierces my skin.
I find that love is all but a sin.
What madman told me to hate?
I need to rethink before its too late.
I’ve crushed every heart that I’ll ever hold
Filled up my soul with disgrace and cold.
My words are sharp; used to kill.
Pain and fury are my greatest thrill.
My veins are filled with vicious blood.
The kind that leaves yours in the mud.
I’ve tried to change; Worthless attempts.
I soon found out that the devil tempts.
What kind of monster have I become.
I do believe; my dark deed is done.

Ooo! That was great! Really deep and dramatic in general. It's just one of those pieces of work that need to be out there. I can't see how I could tell you how to improve because I'm a bit new on here, and younger than you, apparently (I don't know). Anyhow, maybe you could try.... well have you tried writing a novel yet? Maybe you could do that. I find that most people can do it, they just don't. So, maybe you should think about starting up a novel or story thing. You could post it in chapters. I'll be excited to see what it turns out like. Oh, and don't worry about thinking of a topic, it's pretty easy. I don't think you'll have trouble with that anyway. See you!