Do I?

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Do I love?
I do not know.
He kisses me,
I cannot show
an eagerness
to him who loves,
I kiss him back
‘tis not enough.

No sweetness in
that little kiss,
I shudder at
my marble lips.
I wonder why
I cannot show
a fevered heart,
I do not know.

I wish I could
hand him my heart,
but how could I
without that spark?
Do I love?
I think I know,
I fear I have
no love to show.
All that I'm after is a life full of laughter, as long as I'm laughing with you.:)




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Wow.
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Wow. Very nice poem. the wording, everything is wonderful.

Do I love..? I think the dots make it more obvious that it is a question posed towards yourself.
I do not know.
He kisses me,
I cannot show
an eagerness
to him who loves,
I kiss him back
‘tis not enough. LOVE

No sweetness in
that little kiss,
I shudder at
my marble lips.nice imagery/
I wonder why
I cannot show
a fevered heart,
I do not know. nicce, I love the italics

I wish I could
hand him my heart,
but how could I
without that spark? Heres where the lines get a little clunky. I'm not sure how to rewrite that, though. It works, it's just not perfect.
Do I love?
I think I know,
I fear I have
no love to show. perfect ending.
So, a dyslexic man walks into a bra....




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Wow,I really love this poem.It explains the unreturned love,empty soul,missing person in a one sided love.It was amazing,truly.I think your tempo is off slightly but the rythme is fairly even.There is such strong visual coherence.A truly riveting peice.Great job!
~spartacus~

my love is empty lost somewhere I am sorry that I will not be there when you come home empty as can be ~dreamer~



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