Temper - A superhero

A few pages of a thing-magig I'm not sure I should continue... what do you reckon? Any opinions are helpful. And yes, she is a superhero, even though she might not seem that way in this little bit













Thanks! Tell me if you can't read the text and I'll put it underneath the image.

Nice, my internet is capped so I can't see your pictures to well.
1. Flat lines. Everything seems to be only one tone. I suggest not using lined paper it looks messy and makes it harder to draw a good picture. Using a different pencil might help. personally i like mine very sharp.
2. Proportion, try looking at your own face, how everything is placed in correspondence to everything else. Her breasts and body do not look right.
3. More detail would be nice, pay attention to shape, shadow and tone.

I might do a better review once my internet is up! keep up the good work.

I could read the text, but it was a struggle. In the first image, I thought I was looking at her front, and spent some time trying to figure out her face...which turned out to be the back of her helmet.
Other than that, it was great! you should scan it though, and increase the contrast so it's easier to see. Pencil oftentimes is much too light.
Jenth

Nice comic! The writing is a little hard to make out, but the bits I did get were awesome. The actual drawing is good, as suggested before a sharper pencil would not only help define your pictures, but allow you to add shadow and tone, greatly improving the overall aesthetic. Also it would help you form your characters more realistically with attention to proportion and detail. i.e. (normal head size and muscle outlines). Overall though a job well done!