Just Four

Four letters changed my life,
just four, not one more.
You may wonder what they were,
Love?
I thought it was.
He was charming,
gentle and sweet.
Fate decided we should meet.

A single rose,
on a white topped table,
the lights dimmed.
Gorgeous food,
a romantic mood.
A sneaky kiss,
lips brush
a moments rush,
a dizzy high like a drug.
The snap of his fingers for the bill,
his haste to leave,
his hunger to touch,
his need to be pleased.

The click of a door,
lips meet,
passion flowing.
His tongue explores,
his hands roaming.
Up the stairs,
kiss never breaking.
Top and shirt abandoned.
The creak of springs,
from a mattress.
Silence.
A whisper,
“A part of me will always be with you.”

Little did I know how true that would be.
Four letters changed life for me,
just four, not one more.
A-I-D-S.

Four letters changed my life,
just four, not one more.I love the internal rhyme, you should make more!
You may wonder what they were,
Love?
I thought it was.
He was charming,
gentle and sweet.
Fate decided we should meet.

A single rose,
on a white topped table,
the lights dimmed. Very good description.
Gorgeous food,
a romantic mood.
A sneaky kiss, Sneaky?
lips brush
a moments rush,
a dizzy high like a drug.
The snap of his fingers for the bill,
his haste to leave,
his hunger to touch,
his need to be pleased.No rhyme here, at all. For some reason it bother me a bit. But I love the descriptions!

The click of a door,
lips meet,
passion flowing.
His tongue explores,
his hands roaming.You paint pictures very well.
Up the stairs,
kiss never breaking.
Top and shirt abandoned.Abandoned seems to sharp.
The creak of springs,
from a mattress.
Silence.
A whisper,
“A part of me will always be with you.”

Little did I know how true that would be.I love it.
Four letters changed life for me,
just four, not one more.
A-I-D-S.I never expected that, very good poem! Full of emotion.

Over all your poem is fantastic! It only had a few weird part, but its amazing!

This was wonderful! I never expected the twist in the end! You did great! One little thing though... in the line "from a mattress" you sort of break the flow. It doesn't rhyme like the rest of the poem. It's good like this, but I just thought I'd point it out in case you wanted to change it. All in all, really great job!!!
It was a very interesting piece. I enjoyed it very much! If you write more poetry that you want reviewed, please PM me!
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Wow, I really liked this! It was amazingly done, and agreed, the twist at the end was surprising. Awesome job.

Oh!
That was basically my reaction when I got to the end of the poem. I like how you lead the reader on and don't give any hint of what the poem is really about, but in the same way I sort of wish that we could know a bit more about the emotion from the narrator after we realise what she's actually talking about. It seems a little bit cold - you've told us, and you've told us in a well-written way, but I'm just left to wonder how the narrator feels, and maybe a bit more of a hint throughout the poem that something terrible happened would help with that. Apart from that, well-written, and a good concept.