She Doesn't Know

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just to clarify things, there are different people when i used the different pronouns, "I", "he" and "you" and "she" they are all different people so be aware of this if it gets confusing. review this, thanks! try to guess what this is about.

I watch silently.
I witness quietly.
Everything is still,
nothing moves.

I stand up, unafraid.
White surfaces are marked,
forever scarred until erased.
Drifting eyes follow,
and i can see.

Light streams through
the broken glass.
Sun beams dance across your face.
if you could see me now, I wish.

He watches and I notice this.
He smiles,
in peaceful bliss.
Time passes and he keeps observing.

She doesn't know,
she doesn't know.
She looks down,
every second.

Never expected,
his dark eyes lost in thought.

how many of you are confused? if you are, i achieved my goal.




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Wow! You did acheive your goal. I am very, very confused. Can you explain this please????
~Shorty :D
"There is a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased that line."
~Oscar Levant

"Gravitation is not responsible for people falling in love."
~ Albert Einstein
(heehee about gravitation :P)




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Haha I am not confused, but its probably because I took this poem and interpreted it in my own way. I love this poem because I can relate. Its simple yet beautiful. What did you intend this to mean? What was the purpose of this poem? iI took it as loving someone who you shouldn't, and 'She' doesn't know about you loving that person. Correct me if I'm wrong haha! :)
"Never be bullied into silence. Never allow yourself to be made a victim. Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself."
Harvey Fierstein
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
Plato




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wow I like this poem too, mainly because you wrote it in such a way that each person who reads it can relate to it in their own way and make it personal. I think the point of poetry is to express yourself and interprate poems in your own way, and i think what you have written allows others to do just that:) great poem for sure:)



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