Omnipotent

Every time I close my eyes
Images ripple, full of lies (You need some sort of breaking punctuation here - perhaps a dash?)
A whisper so silent, a siren's soliloquy (I'm loving the sibilance here. )
Learn from your mistakes, a logical mystery

Entangled in confusion, need not to worry
There are still chances, a warmhearted sorry
The source of strength is within
I know I can do it, it must have been
(I'm really confused here. Are the lines supposed to lead off from one another?)
Excelsior courage is to vanquish
In the end, we will experience a happy finish ("Happy" seems awkward here.)
Nice guys finish last ("Nice guys" seems wrong here too. Perhaps change it to something along the lines of "The good people finish last"?)
Entrained by great faith, a truly-made trust (insert ending punctuation mark - I would put a period.)

Red moon, Blue star
A very genuine hardship, done so far
Set your mind into a dream come true
Rejoice and be happy, problems gone few

This is a good poem! You have a wide vocabulary and have the ability to use many poetic techniques that enhance your writing - alliteration, sibilance, rhyming etc. However, there are a couple of things that I believe you should work on:

(1) To separate different lines clearly, with punctuation marks like commas or periods; and
(2) Make sure that you don't redeem the quality of your writing just for the sake of making it rhyme. Sometimes your expression seems awkward and forced.

All in all, a great piece! Keep on writing.

Hey, Pervy here. Wonderful work, that's it =). Sorry, but I can't complain about it at all, except for a few nitpicks I spotted (I have the eyes of a hawk, you see ).

"Images ripples, full of lies" <---Images ripple*
"In t he end, we will experience a happy finish" <-- In THE end
That's all ^^

Great poem, I'd love to read more.

Sincerely,
The perverted Iguana~

I enjoyed reading this immensly
Good collection of imagery.
And I mean, really good
I found it hard to grasp the meaning of this poem, but with me, that same thing happens as with all good poems.
The important thing is that I enjoyed reading this. It flows good real' good too
Yay! Xx

Hey, the first thing I noticed about this was the awesome flow. Well done with that!!!!
I also think the vocabulary is good. Because the others did a nice job reviewing, there's not much for me to say.
I truly enjoyed this, but it could use a little work, punctuation and all ... But again, I really love the flow. Keep writing!!

thank you all guys!!! i'll edit some of my typos and errors,

ps. have edited some mistakes XD