Check Yes Juliet (For Teardrop's "Drawing a Song")

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This is from the music video for the song Check Yes Juliet, by We The Kings. 'Tis (as mentioned in the title) for Teardrop's competition. I know there are a few mistakes but, for fear of overworking (which is my specialty) I'm not going to edit this further, so comments on what you like/don't like about it would be more appreciated than comments on how I could improve this one (though comments on how I can improve future works are appreciated :) ) Also, I didn't scan it, I took a photo, which is why there's a slightly strange angling problem.


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That night she drew her swan breath in a bed
Made soft with all her razor blades,
That kissed her wrists with the romance you lacked.
As the hands that you’d kissed now dealt the trades






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Wow, your drawing is absolutely gorgeous. The shading on it is near-perfect and you even included some of the freckles! The only thing wrong with it that I can see is that the shading on the right person's chin is slanted up just a smidge more than it should be. But that doesn't mean much from me - I suck at realistic drawing. (Although my friends say that I can draw really cute anime chibis. ^_^) Anyway, I really, really like it. Great job!

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Very nice job! This is really good realistic drawing, and as someone who aspires to be able to do things like that I'm very impressed. It's also very brave to exhibit your work next to the real thing! I guess the only thing: you did a nice job giving the person on the left the freckles/pimples, but the one on the right is missing them. I think that they really add a sense of realism and connection to the real world to the piece, and would definitely include them. One other thing: don't be afraid to have dark regions on your pictures. I noticed that you drew in what you knew was supposed to be there when the picture just showed black. It's okay, even good, to shade dark.

Great job, and keep drawing!!!

Sarebear
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