Starlight, Starbright

My skin is stretched so thin
that people look straight through me.

I have not light enough, nor strength enough,
nor fixédness enough to shine;
therefore I must
like a moth outside the window
be forever locked and barred

within the night.

I don't usually critique(sp?) but I liked this. It was nice and short.

My favourite part is:

I have not light enough, nor strength enough,
nor fixédness enough to shine;
therefore I must
like a moth outside the window
be forever locked and barred

This is my first ever critique so please forgive any ignorance or error on my part.

I really enjoyed this poem, it is incredibly descriptive and you captured the meaning beautifully. Good work!

this was short, sweet and perfect. i loved the ending. i apologize, as i am usually a rather...or sort of...thorough critiquer, but this is so...good.

fixédness

*nods in understanding*
great, great. ending = wow. keep writing.