W.R.I.T.E.R.S (Prologue)

MilkNCookies,

Oh. My. God.

This is genious and I love it - really, really love it. I love the ideas and the writing style and everything about it. Keep going with this great idea - please!

I must go read the first chapter! Excuse me, miss!

Keep writing!

~ Moonlight

Oh my goodness I really really love this! It feels so like a James Patterson novel. I want to read more so bad! I'm bound to get addicted! I love books like this, something that puts characters I relate to in danger, sometimes it seems like I'm the one that could be in trouble! And in your book, I definately am! Good Job!
Keep on writing!
-Ruth

Um. Wow, you have quite a few reviews here. xD Since I was requested, I'll review this anyways. Please, forgive me if I'm repeating everything everybody else says. (Those are way too many reviews to read through for me. xD)

I suppose that I'll start by saying that this concept is awesome, as you've probably heard from the other all ready. Books and words are powerful tools as it is, it'll be interesting to see where you go with this. You've got a good idea, and personally, I can't wait to read a bit more.

Of course, I'll throw in some nit-picky typed things quickly. Just little bits that bugged me.

First off, I won't quote you here-- as I really don't see the need to yet. Your first paragraph was a bit on the choppy side. I suppose that you were probably cutting them off like that in order to add a bit of a punch, but that only works if it's one or two sentences. You have a few too many here, and it just starts to get distracting.

MilkNCookies wrote:It's too powerful and makes the reader think s/he wants to love someone and be loved.

That word that I have in bold-- that sort of really kind of bugged me. It wouldn't bother me if this was a non-fiction text book or something, but in a novel, anything with slashes like that irritates me. (It might be more of a personal preference, but hey. xD) I would suggest changing it to "she or he" or vise versa.

Also, I noticed that you used WRITERS, which just makes it look like you're trying to shout the name. W.R.I.T.E.R.S is technically speaking the proper formatting for this.

Otherwise, there's not much to point out here. (Possibly because it's so short. xD) There are a few places where this read a little choppily, so I would try watch out for those. Combining a few of your sentences most certainly wouldn't hurt.

Otherwise, as I've said before, the concept of this whole W.R.I.T.E.R.S. thing is very good. It's original, and it could be taken so many different places. Since this is the prologue, there's not too much plot to analyze yet, so I suppose I'll move onto chapter 1 now.

Thanks for the read!

~~Cass

Hey MilkNCookies!

Cute story! And a promising introduction besides. This reminds me of modern day children's books... and trust me, I love those, lol. Now! Just a couple of nitpicks.

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I would make this more Latin sounding.

Also... Prologue (in your title!) needs to be spelled right. It's Prologue!