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missing someone
what does that mean?
is it the frustration
or a deep devastation

to see her smile
and hear her laugh
with her funny stories
that never runs out

it took a day
to change a lifetime
just like that
just like that

now i know
how precious the memories
now i know
because it's all that was left

i saw her smile
i heard her laugh
but where is she
what i found was ache in my heart




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This is very touching may i ask is it about someone :'(




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yes it was about my cousin, left too young.. she has three lovely children




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wow this is very beautiful! it's very touching. I like how there are no capital letters, and I must say, it runs pretty smoothly and is very sad :( I can really understand, as a reader, how you are feeling. What a powerful piece of writing!
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This is truly sad, but it's very beautiful at the same time. It's always so hard to lose someone :(

My only suggestion is this:

"i saw her smile
i heard her laugh
but where is she
what i found was an ache in my heart"

Just add the "an" part, and I think you'll be set! Keep up the good work!



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