Whispers of Rebellion [Locked for Spamming]

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yoyoma1123
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Wed Jan 05, 2011 2:32 am
yoyoma1123 says... · Wed Jan 05, 2011 2:32 am
People are so easily broken,
Their thoughts are muddled.
When we hear the whispers of rebellion our thoughts shift,
we change our motives and what we live for.
There are no whispers,
silence rings in my ears.
So I will begin the whispers of the end of silence.




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Rob
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Wed Jan 05, 2011 11:37 am
Rob says... · Wed Jan 05, 2011 11:37 am
It is really good. :)
I love that you treat the problem of change. That is my concern too. I think you really touched a soft spot with this poem. Dealing with the inability of people to act without being pushed from behind.
You kept it plain and simple , no big emotions, no scenery, just a very strong message.
I love it.
*bows*
"The day we lose our need for dreams is the day the human race forfeits its soul." -John Chiam
"Morpheus: Do you believe in fate, Neo?
Neo: No.
Morpheus: Why not?
Neo: Because I don't like the idea that I'm not in control of my life." -Matrix




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ehte92
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Wed Jan 05, 2011 3:41 pm
ehte92 says... · Wed Jan 05, 2011 3:41 pm
A good piece.... What should i call it?? CUTE...
A simple work and too short and guess if you lengthen it then it would be more attractive...
And everything else is pointed out rob...
Keep up the good work mate...
PM me for anything... :)
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