Holy crypt man! This was absolutely amazing... The flow was brilliant and I love how you ended it with sort of the way you began. This was moving and made me sort of want to smile, biting and thrashing, thats the way I plan to die =]. It was a lovely piece and I'm glad I stumbled on it. The way you set up each stanza was lovely as well. Very good piece you have here =]
I don’t know what to say, it was wonderful! I loved it! The best thing I’ve read all night! Wow I just need a moment to cry about how unbelievably well that was, (softly crying in the back ground). I’m ok, it’s over. Ok so well the first stanza needs some editing, it didn’t really have that flow as the rest of it did, but it was still great!
edgy, dark, choppy, and brilliant. this, is a poem in a million. i'm not capable of going through it line by line, as it exceeds my mental prowess x) but what I do know, is that's it's edgy, dark, choppy, and freaking brilliant.
This was genious. Brilliant. It showed such an amazing perspective. I believe that the meaning could be transformed to fit most peoples idea and thoughs. For example, for myself, I deducted that you were showing different situations where God can be condesending or a lack-there-of. And the devil gives you no choice but to fall to him and it shows the instability of our mortality. I find that this is all too true. However, as in many cases, this poem could fit multiple meanings that you may not have even thought of. It is the magic behind poetry. And you portrayed to its fullest extent, intended or not. Well done. Very well done. PM me anytime.
This was.. tragically impressive. In a good way of course. Brilliant work.
Being children of a cruel reality, we fall prey to the greater powers. To envy. To madness. Betrayal. Love. And yet without these things, we cannot remain human. Without these things, we are nothing. But it is the greatest sacrifice. To envy. To be mad. To betray. To love. To be human.
