Menimor, not one of our greatest

Okay, just for the record I didn't write this, our drummer did so I'll forward all complaints to him

Neway, here's the lyrics for "Forgotton Friendship"

Who's that outside
I think its a girl I once knew
Are you sure it's her?
'Cos if it was I'd thought I'd remember

She keeps looking at me
It's as if shes known me forever
And if I'd seen her before
I'd never of forgotton that smile on her face

So she turns away
And I'm sure she keeps turning my way
There's a tear in her eye
And she whispers a name I've never heard before

You know I hate to ask
But why is it you keep staring
If I'd ask your name
Would I regret smoking that cigarette

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Thank you for reading, the song is mainly in G chord, but the lead guitarist plays in drop B

All criticism will be read, and not used as firewood

I like it, all accept the last line, just didnt work for me. Sorry for being so briedf but yes, enjoyable read, be even better in song. Nice work.

Moved to the Lyrics section.

Fine, except... it's spelled "Memoirs" if you're refering to memories. It's French.

It's as if shes known me forever

^ should be she's i.e. with an apostrophe.

I'd never of forgotton that smile on her face

^ should be 'have' and not 'of' - annoyingly common mistake, that...

apart from that the only thing i can find fault with is the lack of commas, full-stops etc. but this wouldn't really be noticable while you were singing, only if you wrote the words out.

i agree with adam; what's up with the last line. if there's a specific reason it's not so bad but it seems sorta weird...

~KayJuran~

Thanks for all your comments. I have forwarded all criticism to our drummer. Snoink, Menimor aka. Many More is our band name, and I didn't know what the last line was about either, but he said something about a kiss, and the fact that she wouldn't touch him if she realised he smoked.