A Boundless Friendship

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Sidenote to the reader: This account is based on an actual experience in my life. This is a re-cap of a...reflective moment I had while thinking of one of my close friends who moved away after a year or so. Dedicated to Liberty*, the most genuinely cheerful person I met in my short-lived life. Friendship endures, and ours is no exception~ :) <3

I eagerly plopped myself down on my self-made bed of snow, elevated at least two feet from the ground. The view was breath-taking, there was no denying that. Staring above at the beauty that is the great outdoors, I was slowly slipping into something I wished I knew how to describe. It was funny how I'd never bothered to this before. Ever. Now here I was, lying motionlessly on a snow bed with my head tilted high to the sky. I didn't bother to look at the sparkling, sun-lit blanket of snow surrounding me. Why bother? I had what I needed at the moment right above me. My heart soared, a slight wind caressing my rosy cheeks. Ignoring the constant squeal of the passing cars nearby, I slipped deeper into the unknown.

The "tanned" and sturdy tree planted to the right of my home stretched its comparatively smaller branches in front of my very own eyes. Branches sprouted off of branches, creating a somewhat web-like structure. There was a similar tree across the street performing the similar effect. I had felt as if my eyes had been replaced with kaleidoscopes, revealing a secret world of trees galore. The sky was cloudless that day, the sun was subsituting in their place with a limited luminescent glow. I smiled to myself, filled with a joy I reserved on special occasions. This had been one of those occasions. Suddenly, that joy had morphed into a bittersweet feeling. An insignificant yet unignorable sense of yearning was stirred in me. (I'm aware that yearning wouldn't exactly be the best word for this scenario, but I thought that "An insignificant yet unignorable sense of missing was stirred in me" wouldn't make sense).

Do you hear me? I'm talkin' to you. Across the water, across the deep blue ocean. Under the open sky, oh my, Liberty I'm trying. I simply could not surpress the urge to laugh at my replacement of the word 'baby' with 'Liberty' and I laughed not verbally but mentally, interrupting the song Lucky by Jason Mraz and Colbie Caillat. I knew missing Liberty wouldn't change a thing.

"Liberty! Come back, we miss you!" I wanted to shout, fully aware it didn't make a difference. (We as in my group of friends whom had also been Liberty's group of friends). Flashes of the times I had spent with Liberty were screened into my mind: biking around the neighborhood with her attempting not to fall off, acting as if we were in elementary school again at her house, attending school events together; the memories unleashing themselves from their hidden chamber in my mind. With a heavy sigh, I came to the realization I had a choice. Either to feel pathetically hopeless about the slim chance of reuniting with Liberty again soon, or to keep my hope bottled up in my heart until my hopes possibly would come true.

I keep you with me in my heart. You make it easier when life gets hard. Colbie Caillat's velvety voice rang throughout my ears, and I held onto those lyrics with a new-born hope. I would see my friend again someday, whether it be ten days from today or ten years I was willing to wait out the endless time between the current day and the day when we would meet once again. I flopped off of the snow bed, and began to head inside. Taking a glance back, I grinned. Wait 'till I tell you about this day, Liberty. We'll laugh about it someday...someday soon.
Last edited by deelish on Fri Mar 11, 2011 12:09 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Hey,

This is in the wrong catergory, it should be in short story :)

It was good and very moving, well done.

It go through with a fine comb as I noted one or two punctuation errors but nothing major.

Keep it up and PM me for anything.

~Retro Disco666
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Hey, deelish!
I thought this was really, really good. Very deep and sweet. I love your writing style.

One tiny typo:
I would see my friend again someday, whether it be ten days from today or ten yearsI was willing to wait out the endless time between the current day and the day when we would meet once again.
It's 'years I' not 'yearsI'.

I would see my friend again someday, whether it be ten days from today or ten yearsI was willing to wait out the endless time between the current day and the day when we would meet once again.
Wonderful last line. Love it!

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I agree... this is in the wrong catagory, it should be in short stories.

I have to admit that I was kind of confused with this, it does not make much sense to me...

Anyway, it was a good story although confusing, so keep writing!

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Hey there! I love the song Lucky, by the way! lol

So, I didn't really notice much mistakes in here -- just a couple, if any, really. The only nitpick I have is about the start.

Plop!

It just seems unecessary, considering the fact that in the following line you're talking about plopping into the pile of snow. So maybe take that out? Just a suggestion.

OVERALL:
So, truly, this was good. It seemed really heartfelt, all things considered. I've never really had to deal with losing a friend to another place far away. But you brought in a new perspective -- and it sounds like it really sucks. But you stuck through, and you had hope. I hope you do [or did] get to see your friend Liberty again! All the best!

-- Flux
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person.

Give him a mask and he will tell you the truth."

-- Oscar Wilde



Be happy, my friend; and if you obey me in this one request, remain satisfied that nothing on earth will have the power to interrupt my tranquility.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein