Love's Cliche </3

Or has it all been done too many times before?

But it’s been said before, by those better than me.

It’s all nothing but overworked cliché.

StoryWeaver13 wrote:

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60-second writing challenge...probably my first-ever love poem...

I would tell you if I could -
But now a rose just ain’t so sweet.
I would tell you this is love,
But it’s been said before, by those better than me. (I think saying 'by others better than me' would sound better)

Should we wish upon a star
Or has it all been done too many times before?
Should I not look in your eyes,
Since it’s been seen so many times?

Well I’ll tell you like it is, I guess -
I love you, I think, but I just hate the way (That confused me a little. At first, I asked: The way, what?)
I’m out of words to tell you… (The three periods are unnecessary)
Love. It’s all nothing but overworked cliché.

But I’ll tell you anyway.

I would tell you if I could -
But now a rose just ain’t so sweet.
I would tell you (that?)this is love,
but it’s been said before, by those better than me.

Should we wish upon a star?
( if it is all one sentence,then this doesn't need to be capitalized- and disregard the first question mark)or has it all been done too many times before?
Should I not look (into?) your eyes,
since it’s been seen so many times?

Well, I’ll tell you like it is, I guess -
I love you, I think, but I just hate the way
I’m out of words to tell you…-This part is good, but you hesitate too much. Saying i guess, and an think just seems a little redundant. You could say, " I think I love you.." or something different, and it has the same affect, but smoother.
Love. It’s all nothing but overworked cliché.- That seems redundant, also.Don't really need the overworked part.

But I’ll tell you anyway.