Prom Disaster *2*

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I was meaning to post a second part, but took forever. It just finished wrong, didn't it?
Well, here it is --enjoy!


Part 2

I cleared my throat and watched Fran turn to her right and run out of sight. Lucas started to walk up to me as I look a big step back.

"Why, Lucas, why?" my throat was clogging up.

He swiped his face with his hand and sighed.

"We seriously wanted to tell you..." my heart was beating hard against my chest during his hesitation. "...but, we thought that you wouldn't take it right. I mean we're your best friends and us being together would be hard for you." he tried to explain.

"Funny," I said sharply.

My palms were starting to sweat as I looked at his eyes. Too blue, too true --no wait, too fakly true, too honest, too fake.
My heart hit even harder against my chest. I couldn't handle my anger, it was running through my whole body like, water down a "Slip-n-Slide".

He brushed his hands through his hair and sighed again.

"Listen, Taylor..." I cut him off.

"No, you listen. I can't believe that you guys didn't even bother to tell me about this. I'm your best friend. Do I have to repeat that? Now, you guys lost my trust." I practically yelled.

My hearts anger from breaking into pieces was coming out of my mouth.

"Don't even bother to go all sweet talking Lucas! I, I, I am so freakin' pissed! Do you wanna know why? Well, do you?" This time I yelled.

He simply nodded.

"Because I love you; not the best friend love, more you ass, more." I spit out with sweat all over my body.

My heart skipped a beat. My stomach was flipping like crazy and I couldn't stand here. I did not want to hear his answer. So, I got my legs to un glue from the marbled floors and walked past him, rubbing my shoulder against him. My heels clicked louder and louder with each step I took.

Ke$ha's "Your Love Is My Drug" filled my ears once I stepped near the Gym doors. Lucas didn't even walk after me to stop me. I didn't wanna see what was going on back there, so I walked in with a feeling of crying.

People pushed against me and bumped into the walls. The smell of alchohol filled my small nose as they danced.
I elbowed myself through. The enon colored lamps beated to the song once I got to the very table I was at before. I breathed out, not knowing that I was holding my breathe. I sat on the pink chair and watched the happiness of the dance floor rise.
Tears stung my eyes but I didn't let them go. It was all too much.

I felt someone tap my shoulder lightly and I turned around in my chair. I didn't like what I saw.

"Go away Lucas," I demanded.

He shook his head and stepped even closer to me. His face was two inches away from mine.

"I don't want to go away." he whispered.

"Step away! You already have Carol, you can't have me either! You can't date both of your best friends, that's sick." I whispered loudly.

The anger still ran through my vains.

"I don't want to date both of you, I'll tell you what had happened."

"No," I said sharply.

He shook his head and rolled his eyes. "Please, I want to explain everything..."

Like I wanted to listen to him. But he's my best friend, and he seems to really wanna figure things out. No, I'm not gonna let his fake innocence go through me.

"No!" I yelled.

Then I heard some "Oh," 's running through the Gym. I turned my head and caught everyone staring at us. Everything was quiet, even the music shut off. I felt hot and started to blush.
Lucas put his hands on my neck and got my head to turn around.

"Just listen," he whispered.

Everything in me tingled at his touch.

"I don't know if I can," my voice was cracking up.

Tears tired to push through the barrier. But, I wouldn't let them go.

"Please, just listen," he begged.

I didn't say or do anything.

"Thank you," he smiled, "This is exactly what happened --I was hanging out over there with my friends," he pointed to the spot he was at, "...and with my date. Carol came up to us when Henry was half way through his story. She was wild eyed and yelled 'Taylor ran away in tears!'. So, since, I'm your best friend just like she is..." I cut him off.

"Was," I said.

He continued anyway. "She was, we went looking for you through the dance floor," I cut him off once again.

"Then, if you guys were looking for me, why would you end up making out in the janitor's closet!"

"I'm getting there," he said, annoyed.

I rolled my eyes as he let my neck go.

"She knew that I, I am in love with you so, she wanted to do something about it,"

"During the dance, when you were looking for me, when I wasn't found until... then?" I whispered loudly.

He rubbed his hand on his forehead and looked annoyed.

"Listen and don't cut me off." I nodded. "Thank you Taylor; anyway, She knew about that and then she ran into the hallway, she saw you. She saw you stopping yourself from crying, and she ran up to me. She said 'I found her, this is the perfect time.' I was confused by the whole situation. 'What do you mean by the perfect time?' I asked, and she pulled me hand and took me out of the Gym. We were in the hall behind you. And I really wanted to hug you, make you feel safe, loved. But she didn't let me do it. We went to the other hall and saw the two doored Janitor's closet."

He sighed and waited to see if I had anything to say so far. Of course I wanted to freaking yell at him for that huge lie, one, the Janitor's closet isn't two doored. Okay, it is. But I didn't believe that my best friend Carol would ever do that.

"...She pulled me in and," he swallowed loudly, "Told me that I should make you jealous,"

"And you listened to that whore!?" I yelled at the top of my lungs.

All the anger that was formed in me was just too much. It was eating at my stomach, heart, and even brain.

"Taylor, I didn't. I disagreed with her making out idea,"

"But you did it anyway," I reminded him.

"No, no I didn't."

I put on a confused face and almost spoke up until Lucas covered my mouth with his hand.

"No, Taylor, no I didn't. Then she just started to make wierd noises, some humms and some 'Oh's Ah's'. I heard you walking up to the Janitor's closet. She was starting to undress and mess up her hair. 'What the hell are you doing?' I asked her but she just smiled and didn't reply. Then she played around with my hair even though I tried to stop her. She unbuttoned my shirt and kissed me. That's when you barged in. You caught her kissing me, not me kissing her, so when you barged in I was happy that she stopped. I was about to run out from the other entry but she pulled me so you could see me. It's not my fault." he explained with a deep breathe after it.

I imagined the whole seen in my mind and it did look realistic. But I'm not a girl, I'm a teenage girl with brains. I didn't fully believe him, but we'll have to see.

"Really Lucas, really?" I asked.

He nodded and I saw his apple jump up his neck. He was nervous.

"I don't believe you," nervousness was a proof of lying.

I jumped off my chair and pushed his muscled chest. He needed to stay away from me. I walked through the silent Gym as the crowd made a way for me to get out without elbowing through.
I pushed the wooden doors and stepped out. No one was in the halls, no one. I heard someone running in heels though.
I followed the noise by walking quietly.

It was coming closer so I stayed in my place and waited. The person turned the corner to me. It was Caron.

"Hey whore," I said with tingles running down me.

She stood five feet away from me, jaw dropped.

"What did you just call me?" she asked, flabbergasted.

"Whore," I repeated.

She walked up to me and pointed at my face.

"Be afraid of saying that Taylor," she hissed.

"No, no I won't. You knew that I loved Lucas! You knew that, and you went all make out scene with him? What the fuck was that?!" I yelled at her face.

Her face went from angry to shock.

"Make out scene? It was real, un like your little crush. And if you wanted him so badly, you would've done something than just stand around like the fool you are." she lied.

I knew when she lied. It was when her eye twitched constantly, her right eye. It was twitching like crazy now.

"Liar," I said sharply.

"Not," she lied once again.

I put my hand against my hip and put on a sly grin.

"Fine," she gave up, "We love each, We've been dating, stop it!" she yelled at her twitching eye.

I laughed and she finally actually gave up.

"He's in love with you, I wanted to find a way to get you guys together without actually telling you. So I "made out"" She made the " sign "... with him. I ruffled his hair and mine. I un buttoned his top and torn up my dress. It was all a scene to get you jealous, to want him for sure." No sign of any twitching this time.

She looked straight into my eyes and sighed.

"Finally you spoke the truth," I sighed.

She smiled and pulled me into a hug.

"Can you forgive us for everything?" she squeezed me, "We truly just wanted to get you jealois!" she whispered into my ear.

"Yes, I'll forgive you guys,"

She squeezed me harder and let me go. There was a smile plastered on her face.

"Thanks for trying though," I laughed.
Last edited by Nike on Wed Dec 22, 2010 10:31 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Hello, this is CardDragon. In your story there was an error.
My hearts anger from breaking into pieces was coming out of my mouth.

There should be a comma before heart. That single mistake confused me, and I had to read it over again to get it.
Other than the story seemed okay for an ending, though it is a cliff hanger and the usually audience would want a sequel.
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Hello there. :)
Lucas started to walk up to me as I took a big step back.

"Because I love you; not the best friend love period More you ass period More."

I think it adds to the atmosphere with all the periods. ;)
The neon (?) colored lamps beated to the song once I got to the very table I was at before. I breathed out, not knowing that I was holding my breath.

I'm not sure what you meant by beated?
The anger still ran through my veins.

"I don't want to date both of you, I'll tell you what had happened."

But he was my best friend, and he seemed to really wanna figure things out. No, I'm not gonna let his fake innocence get through me.

Her eyes were wild eyed and she yelled 'Taylor ran away in tears!'.

he explained with a deep breath after it.

I imagined the whole scene in my mind and it did look realistic.

It was Carol.

"Make out scene? It was real, unlike your little crush.

I unbuttoned his top and torn up my dress.

"Finally you're saying the truth," I sighed.

"We truly just wanted to get you jealous!"

So we got a little problem here. Why would Lucas say that he wanted to tell her about the dating her best friend stuff, when in fact, he says that he didn't want to make her jealous? Change that part... Make the guy actually want to make her jealous because he wanted to see her true feelings. OR make Carol say all that about her relationship and Lucas just stands by, too shocked to say anything... But personally I think the first one is the most realistic.
I haven't read the first part, and I don't know where it is, to be honest. But this is supposed to be a novel and it seems awfully short for one. I feel like you're already half way through and it's the first part? Maybe add more details, and parts before (if the first part isn't that already) to see what is the relationship between the three best friends before. And get to know the MC's. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Keep writing!

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wow! I really didn't expect that. I expected that Carol really did like Lucas. I love the twists and the unexpected. You really need to kepp writing. You're amazingly talented!!!!
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