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Okay, so I can reading this book "The Witch of Portobello" by Paulo Coelho, and decided to summarize the parts I'd read in a poem, more for a warm-up than anything else, because I hadn't turned out any material I liked for a couple of days. I turned out actually kind of liking it though. :)





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She always loved to dance-
she would go until she dropped of exhaustion,
until her eyes closed and her soul sang,
and her son slowly fell into dreams.
She used to dance for God-
she used to sing for God,
to pray for God,
to join God in music and his Church,
and take communion every Sunday.
But the Church, the Church abandoned her,
and Father Giancarlo Fontana, he knew it.

He spoke for the Church.
He lost her love, and it pained him,
but he was a man with no regrets- only reflections,
sorrowful as they may be.

And Father’s faith, well it may be rock solid,
it may never waver with God,
but he sure doubts his people,
wonders where God went in all the rulemaking.
He even imagines that God
was thrown from the Church,
as Jesus was in their Holy Book,
which is more a guideline than anything else, right?

But she lived- she lived, and she was gentle,
and she learned happiness from an art
that was base and instinctual.
Her son grew up with her love of life,
slept through the crashing of cymbals and drums,
the booms of the bass and pittering pattering of
tranced mamma’s feet, sliding across the floor
as she let everything go to the Vertex.




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Wow, I really loved this one! I think you could have perhaps included a bit more imagery or rhythm to make it more poemy, but you know what, sod that! You don't need it! Haha.

Excellent poem, I love it.

Keep writing or else! :D




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Well, must say, now I think I want to read this book! It sounds to me like a good book about an artistic woman who got pregnant and then left her church because of this, am I correct? If not, sorry, but that's about what I gathered from this. I also like your idea of making a sort of book review into a short poem, stating everything you know so far. This poem isn't meant to be emotional or stunning or vague or heart-wrentching, just simply stating a book that you're reading. Brilliant.
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