The Rain.

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I'm REALLY excited! It's the first poem that I'm posting here! I have loads. Here it goes...

Here the droplets come again,
Bringing down a glorious rain,
Every single one brings down
A particle of inspiration.

You appear from nowhere,
I can't stop myself but stare,
Peering through the pouring rain,
I see your face emerge.

You are my relieving rain,
And though you bring me such pain
When you are absent,
For you, only, my heart will beat.

My unique source of inspiration,
Stepped out from my imagination,
The most perfect work of art,
Brought down by the rain.

Now the clouds disappear,
No more are you near,
I dream to see you very soon.
Maybe when the rain drops come again.
Last edited by Mikko on Thu Jan 20, 2011 7:50 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Mikko wrote:I'm REALLY excited! It's the first poem that I'm posting here! I have loads. Here it goes...

Here the droplets come again,
Binging down a glorious rain,
Every single one brings down
A particle of inspiration.
O.K. i thought this was on about the weather first of all.
You appear from nowhere,
I can't stop myself but stare,
Peering through the pouring rain,
I see your visage emerge.
I didn't really get this part
You are my relieving rain,
And though you bring me such pain
When you are absent,
For you, only, my heart will beat.
no i understand that your on about a person you like
My unique source of inspiration,
Stepped out from my imagination,
The most perfect work of art,
Brought down by the rain.
this person may cause you upset according to the words
Now the clouds disappear,
No more are you near,
I dream to see you very soon.
Maybe when the rain drops come again.

i think this is really good using the rain/waether to describe ther person your talking about at least thats waht i think your talking about. am i right? any way keep going and i would love to see more of your poems.




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The only suggestion I have is to find a synonym for the word visage. The word just seems to disrupt the flow to me... Other than that, I really love the poem.I think many girls can relate to the meaning of the poem.

He only exists in your imagination and you compare him to the rain. I am the exact same way, except I picture my guy as the sun (: haha
Anyways, very well written. You should be proud! Keep writing
"Let other pens dwell on guilt and misery!" - Jane Austen




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I didn't find much faults in this. It proves that a poem doesn't have to rhyme to be a poem. If you get what I'm saying. This is good, and i really liked this. Well done and keep up the good writing. :wink:
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