Things I Hate

I hate...


small spaces & uncomfortable chairs

overdue books & unheard prayers


unreturned smiles & cliched quotes

empty tissue boxes & scratchy throats


chain wire fences & broken skin

holey stockings & straight gin


misplaced socks & forgotten mail

steep steps & jagged nails


condescending looks & missing pens

thursday mornings & lying friends


missed calls & dirty shoes

unwashed hair & ignored views


scratched c.d's & busy paths

wilted flowers & steaming baths


cold feet & burnt out matches

permanent markers & elbow patches


broken promises & tarnished steel

most of all the way you make me feel

I like this poem good use of description keep it up and keep posting

I like this poem good use of description keep it up and keep posting

It's amazing when you write off a specific topic such as this. There are so many things that a single person dislikes and I found it funny that I hate all these things too. The rhyming made it flow brilliantly and kept me reading till the end.
My favorite is

missing pens

. Hahaha -Fantastico! Keep on Writing!

I like the way the things you hate rhyme! I really like this poem and its simplicity, especially the fact that it relates to most people.
It's sort of ironic really because it's called 'Things I hate' yet the poem makes you smile.

Great poem, the rhythm and rhyme really led up to a great ending. This is the only thing I would change, though. Only to give the poem more emphasis.

BracketW1 wrote:broken promises & tarnished steel,

But most of all, the way you make me feel

I really liked it, I think it sounds cheerful in a weird kind of a way, like you're 'telling the world to go to hell' (only in a way that wasn't totally cliched) and it all ties up neatly at the end, which is nice.

The only thing I'd change is the line:

holey stockings and straight gin

This is because every single 4th thing you hate in a stanza has two syllables and this has only one, so it interrupts the rhythm.

Other than that well done!

The rhyming was really good, I like the flow of it in my mind whilst reading it. Rhyming is good

Simple and sweet. Very effective. Keep writing!

I LOVED THIS!!! I think we hate similar things.. Lovely poem!

eeekk. I love this.
I enjoy reading poems like this.
Really entertaining.

I personally liked this, and I have nothing bad to say. Good Job!