What is Life?

*Okay, I suck at poetry, so bare with me please...and feel free to rip it to shreads!*

What is Life?

What is life,
Without the pain,
The sorrow,
The despair?

What is life,
Without the tears,
The screams,
The hate?

What is life,
Without the fear,
The caution,
The waryness?

What is life,
Without the love,
The compassion,
The hope?

What is life,
Without the adoration,
The bravery,
The adreniline?

What is life,
Without the enjoyment,
The happiness,
The serendipity?

What would life be like?
What would it be without one of these?
Would there really be any love without hate, or hate without love?
Would there be any fear without bravery, bravery without fear?
Would there reall be anything, anything at all?

If one piece goes missing,
Just one small emotion that is overlooked by everyone,
It would all come crashing down like shattering glass.

You see,
Without emotions,
It would all be ruined,
It would all be imbalanced.

We would feel nothing,
We would see nothing,
We would hear nothing,
We would smell nothing,
We would taste nothing,
We would be nothing.

Hey there, Flower here and I will give you a quick review here.

One of the main things that I noticed here is that right in the middle it's almost like you changed subjects. You go from saying what if the whole time to just spirting out random stuff. In order to pull of repition you have to use it properly, which is a hard feat to accomplish. I would put something that said the what if, and then explain it.

That's another thing I noticed here. You don't really have any description or metaphors. These thing are what make up a good poem, I believe at least. I think adding some of these, fixing your repition problem, and maybe even using some more colorful vocabulary would help this poem tremedously.

Hope I helped!

-Flow-

You did a great job with this in my opinion! So many questions gets the reader really thinking beyond the page. Fantabulous!

Good day.
After looking over your poem i do have to say that im not very fond of it, nor does it show a whole lot of literal OR artistic skill. I was kinda hoping for an in-depth philisophical sort of poem, that would get me thinking... but this just got me thinking 'Okay. This person's just trying to do the typical 'hey, im different!?' style, which shows a mile away. Im not saying you are, but this certainly is portraying this image to me.

Halfway through the poem you totally U-Turn and start talking about something totally different to the first few stanza's. Try to keep on subject and if your are gonna do more than one, make sure you merge them in a way that flows and links well.

Repetion is a method used to create tension and to make the user continously look upon the same issue in different aspects, due to what the writer has said about the repeted question in each individual stanza. Yet, here, your use repetion in the wrong way. Take this into mind.
Keep on writing.

Nova.