Cheery Feelin'

Cheery Feelin'

Speeding toward a provincial town, the letters
sealed in utmost solemnity, Bursting
like a spontaneous smile upon shearing. Sheep,
indeed these decisions are fuzzy, uncertain
that the inside is as cute; no doubt
it is clearer, a binary salutation
yea or nay.

Pretty fingers, upon the envelopes
wolves' claws; digging
to grasp the sheep is to grope the future.
Splitting wax indents, circular
as shadows beneath
a soon-to-be-graduate's eyes... welling
with arid moisture stinging intent.
But one letter matters most, the rest
a fragment of doubt.

Waiting.
Wishing.
Dear Applicant, We
congratulate your acceptance.
…
…
…
Squeak!! Squeal!! 720º backwards somersault!
The poets write of joy,
they know not;
The actors speak of it,
they know not;
You flow through joy:
you know.

Right? Though all may seem cut
and dry liquid is odd to see,
Be wise, be wary, behave
as you will, enjoy
luminescent darkness etc. etc.
Eh, college is fun, ain't it? True
or false regardless: make it so
that your experience may propagate.

Hey there! How are you? I like this poem very much, but I think you may have to work on the enjambment a little bit. I'll go through and edit a few things. The link break editions are in blue, and any typos/grammatical errors are in red.

ilyaeelz wrote:Speeding toward a provincial town,
the letters sealedin utmost solemnity,
Bursting like a spontaneous smile upon shearing.
Sheep,indeed these decisions are fuzzy,
uncertain that the inside is as cute;
no doubt it is clearer, a binary salutation
yea or nay.

Pretty fingers, upon the envelopes
wolves' claws;
digging to grasp the sheep is to grope the future.
Splitting wax indents,
circular as shadows
beneath a soon-to-be-graduate's eyes...
welling with arid moisture stinging intent.
But one letter matters most,
the rest a fragment of doubt.

Waiting.
Wishing.
Dear Applicant, We
congratulate your acceptance.
…
…
…
Squeak!! Squeal!! 720º backwards somersault!
The poets write of joy,
they know not;
The actors speak of it,
they know not;
You flow through joy:
you know.

Right? Though all may seem cut and dry
liquid is odd to see,
Be wise, be vary,
behave as you will, enjoy
luminescent darkness etc. etc.
Eh, college is fun, ain't it?
True or false regardless: make it so
that your experience may propagate.

Phew! Wow, that was good. Your vocabulary is extraordinary, and you painted quite a picture without being too wordy; the whole poem had a very laid-back air. Wait, I have a question. "Be vary"? Do you mean, "Be varied"? I wasn't sure about that one.

I also wasn't sure whether you meant for the enjambment to be random and a tiny bit off or not. Some poems are like that, and some aren't. It can be hard to tell, sometimes.

Hope this helps.

- Abigail