Wicked. I loved it. "Voldie" is classic and its funny how you just decided to throw Hermione in at the end! I love writing parody like stories like this. ;oD
Wow this was nice and creative..you nwon't expect that to happen but there are some Questions
Where did the girl come from?
How did she get there?
Just the simple stuff But overall you did a great job but this was something I bet everyone enjoyed I know I did I hope to see more of your work around and you can check out mine if you have time. and review me too...see you around ****JessiG833****
This is kind of random. The ending is kind of rushed. Also, Hermione doesn't like Harry, she likes Ron. It's a very funny story! I like it! Its a little weird how Voldemort would have a cookie, but that's what's so funny about it!
It's great!
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Hey, This is one of thee funniest stories I've read on this site. I especially loved the bits when Harry and Voldemort were talking because what they said was so obvious. There were some spelling and grammer mistakes, but everyone else has pointed thse out. Also, the ending could have been a little more descriptive, and there could have been a bit more speech between Harry and Hermione, but all in all it was a great, funny story!
'But I don't want to survive, I want to live.' -WALLE
This is one of the funniest stories on the site in my opinion. Although you did seem to rush the ending a little bit. You never said how Harry got the cookie. And when did Hermione come into the story? And you never said who won the fight over the cookie. But other than that the story is hilarious. Fix this and you'll have a great story.
Tyler.
"Is this the real life, or is this just fantasy? Caught in a landslide, no escape from reality."
Great idea to incorporate humour into such a serious storyline, genius! All of the noticable mistakes and typos have already been pointed out in previous reviews, but I just had to give you guys a pat on the back for this *pats on backs*. Only suggestion would be listen to many of the other reviewers and extend it to include Hermione's entrance, it's a little rushed there. Other than that, great idea, and keep up the good work!
