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ongoeslife · 2010-11-14T00:48:47Z

You paint a door, you paint a wall. You paint a car, you paint a toenail. It all fades, sooner or later. Later or sooner. So why isn't this smile fading? This painted, "I'm fine" look. Why do they see this image, this figure so beautifully painted? Why do they not see the ugliness behind that perfect patina? You paint a stone, you paint a flower. You paint a room, you paint a pot. It all fades, sooner or later. Later or sooner. Why is the world blind to all the black beneath the beautiful paint? Why can they not see the pain behind that unfading paint? Can it not break once? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Hi, guys. :) This is something I wrote after a kinda tough day, out of 364 other tough days. It kinda came to me while I was hiding in my tree. Comments, reviews, critiques... Are more than welcomed!!

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Thu Jun 30, 2011 9:51 pm

ongoeslife says... · Thu Jun 30, 2011 9:51 pm

Thanks, Janika! =) It's nice to get a few encouraging posts like yours every now and then ^_^

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Mon Sep 19, 2011 3:21 am

LittleLionWoman says... · Mon Sep 19, 2011 3:21 am

Love it! This poem is so true, i'm absolutely tired of reading the typical cliche versions of poems, it's quite depressing. But, this is amazing! good job!
-Little Lion Woman

"This is your life and it's ending one minute at a time." Fight Club

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Mon Sep 19, 2011 3:27 am

ongoeslife says... · Mon Sep 19, 2011 3:27 am

Thanks!