A poem about you.

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A smile.
Not a grin, but enough for me to smile back.

A greeting.
Not the warmest, but at least it made me feel noticed.

A small trinket.
Not much, but it meant so much to me.

A kiss.
Not very long, but it still caused my heart to swell.

A promise.
Not alot, but it shakes off all the fears.

A death.
Not much, but it broke me.
"I never said I'd lie and wait forever.
If I died we'd be together.
I cant always just forget her.
But she could try."
The ghost of you- MCR <3




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So sad...I love this poem. It's sweet, but tragic. I have two things - one, "a lot" is two words. Second, and maybe this is just me being picky, but I would change "a small trinket" to just 'a trinket'. That line stands out to me because all your other lines have just two words, "a smile, a greeting, a promise," etc. A trinket is generally something small, so you don't really need to include "small".
Other than that, it's lovely. :)




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Beautiful. It has feeling. I love it.



Poetry is my cheap means of transportation. By the end of the poem the reader should be in a different place from where he started. I would like him to be slightly disoriented at the end, like I drove him outside of town at night and dropped him off in a cornfield.
— Billy Collins