Missing You

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Everyday I think of you

I can’t see you, I can’t spend my time with you

Everyday I wonder if are you are wondering about me,

As I wonder about you





When I’m missing you,

I dream of seeing you,

Over and over in my head.



This isn’t easy to say

I can’t say it anyway,

But, I think I love you.



You sit with your guitar

I dream on falling stars

Maybe we’ll see each other next year.



I can’t help that I’m missing you

I see you over and over in my head.

Knowing that you’ll never know

Is too much for me to take



When I’m missing you,

I dream of seeing you,

Over and over in my head.



You sit with your guitar

I dream on falling stars

Maybe we’ll see each other next year.



All I know is that I’m missing you.
'We will never believe again, kick drum beating in my chest again, oh, we will never believe in anything again, preach electric to a microphone stand.'

*Formerly wickedwonder*




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Hey Wicked!

Thought I'd come and do a 'lil reviewing! Anyway I'll start off with the things I didn't like.

I know that 'you' was a wanted thing with this, though I feel as if there is just to much repetition and another thing is I'm a little confused with what you're trying to say. Maybe you're screaming it out, but as a person who doesn't love in the least, I'm a little lost. But never you mind, just ignore that last part.

Another thing I found was when I try to sing it, I can't get a tune to form. All I get is this Ladaadee thing that just does not work. Maybe you should try rounding off the sentences so that a distinctive tune comes through.

I just want to mention I'm not very good at singing - and lyrics - so my advice may not be the best.

The things I like is the way you did the first part. I like how you explained some things, though I feel you could've done more.

Great Work, Keeping Going!
I spy!




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Hey Wicked!

Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.

Keep writing !
"Winner, winner, chicken dinner" Wise words said by the one and only, Dean Winchester.




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Hey Wicked!

Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.

Keep writing !
"Winner, winner, chicken dinner" Wise words said by the one and only, Dean Winchester.




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Hey Wicked!

Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.

Keep writing !
"Winner, winner, chicken dinner" Wise words said by the one and only, Dean Winchester.




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Hey Wicked!

Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.

Keep writing !
"Winner, winner, chicken dinner" Wise words said by the one and only, Dean Winchester.




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Hey Wicked!

Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.

Keep writing !
"Winner, winner, chicken dinner" Wise words said by the one and only, Dean Winchester.




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This is simple, and gorgeous. Good for a nice tune.
1 Corinthians 16:14 lasa tot ceea ce faci trebuie făcut în dragoste



For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone.
— Audrey Hepburn