The Bells (My version!)

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The bells in the tower are tolling slowly,
Deep as oceans, mournful, holy,
Striking a furtive chord of fear,
The final chord mortal man will hear.

Stories that words will never tell
Are told in the mystic toll of the bell,
The iron bell in the silent room,
With solemn strokes like the strokes of doom.

The bells ring out through the pounding rain
With brazen knells like cries of pain,
Haunting both nightmares and waking dreams
With the crash of thunder that drowns the screams.

Soft in the twilight the vespers ring,
While below in the darkness the choirs sing;
The candlelight trembles; the organ swells
To the steady dirge of the weeping bells.

The silver bells whisper and warble and chime
Measure by measure, counting the time
Till the echoes are dying along with the light,
And the final peal is lost in the night.
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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Awesome job! The rhymes don't sound forced, and your imagery is just great, both visual and auditory imagery. I loved it. :D

~Blue




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Thanks Blue! Man, it's sad when one puts so much effort into a poem and then it gets only one review..... :'(
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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I'm impressed! Very beautiful poem! It's amazing that it flows so well and is pretty visual.
One of my favorite lines is:
"Stories that words will never tell, are told in the mystic toll of the bell."
I also think the last paragraph is absolutely brilliant. Beautiful is actually a better word for it.
Keep writing,
Jane

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Don't you hate it when you write something that you think could be on the front page in the "Most-Liked" section and then no one notices it. :/
Apple of my soul,
Eats me whole,
Take one bite,
No delight,
Rotting hole.




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Thank you, Jane! :) And I know exactly what you mean, when you write something that feels like pure genius but is somehow overlooked by everyone! Grrrrrrrr.
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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Amazing! I really like this poem i was actually excited reading it. Keep up the good work and i look foward to reading more of your stuff



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