A Reflection

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You blame other's for the mistakes you did,
even though your own glass is covered by a lid.

You think you are the best,
but you are no better than the rest.

You think you are a pearl,
but you are a gift no one wants to unfurl.

You think you are going to become great,
but the way you are,
that won't be your fate.

You need to see the reflection of yourself,
because right now,
your character is smaller than an elf.




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First up: this is a really great poem; I mean honestly, it is. There is one tiny thing that might work a little differently if it were changed.

You blame other's for the mistakes you did,

I know that it rhymes with lid, but honestly, I think if you substitute the word "did" for "made" it might be a little easier on the tongue.

I love the poem though. Great work.

-GhostlyImpressions
Ghosts always float through your mind; but they stay longer than necessary. Like my thoughts.




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First up: this is a really great poem; I mean honestly, it is. There is one tiny thing that might work a little differently if it were changed.

You blame other's for the mistakes you did,

I know that it rhymes with lid, but honestly, I think if you substitute the word "did" for "made" it might be a little easier on the tongue.

I love the poem though. Great work.

-GhostlyImpressions
Ghosts always float through your mind; but they stay longer than necessary. Like my thoughts.




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NeoAnderson wrote:You blame other's for the mistakes you did,
even though your own glass is covered by a lid.

You think you are the best,
but you are no better than the rest.

You think you are a pearl,
but you are a gift no one wants to unfurl.

You think you are going to become great,
but the way you are,
that won't be your fate.

You need to see the reflection of yourself,
because right now,
your character is smaller than an elf.


the poem is great I like the way you wrote it,all spaced.it reminds me of a poem my friend wrote called "Perfect".good job keep writing.
"the beauty of words. They can be many different things to many different people. It's all in how we listen. Or how we read." - Lyrical Inspiration (authors note) of Enemies and Playmates by Darcia Helle

-Formally tkpejb




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NeoAnderson wrote:You blame other's for the mistakes you did,
even though your own glass is covered by a lid.

You think you are the best,
but you are no better than the rest.

You think you are a pearl,
but you are a gift no one wants to unfurl.

You think you are going to become great,
but the way you are,
that won't be your fate.

You need to see the reflection of yourself,
because right now,
your character is smaller than an elf.


the poem is great I like the way you wrote it,all spaced.it reminds me of a poem my friend wrote called "Perfect".good job keep writing.
"the beauty of words. They can be many different things to many different people. It's all in how we listen. Or how we read." - Lyrical Inspiration (authors note) of Enemies and Playmates by Darcia Helle

-Formally tkpejb



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