Shadow in the Room

The times when I don't think of you don't amount to a day,
and I love and care for you more than words could ever say,
The fun we have, the love we've made,
there's not a moment that I would trade,
And because of this you're in my life,
and why I want to be your wife,
But there's a shadow in the room that I can't shake,
and it's there even when you aren't awake,
It's between us-always pushing with all it's might,
and even when we don't talk about it, it's never out of sight,
"You left me but I'll wait for you" your eyes often say,
and it breaks my heart to fear for that day,
Part of me knows only the shadow will remain and its caster will never return,
but even though I try to tell myself this; the wheels in my mind often turn,
"What if the owner of the shadow comes back?" my mind cries and fears,
I would rather never be loved at all than to be left here in tears,
I've fully given my heart but to get yours I was a few years slow,
and as much as you say you have, you haven't really let go,
Because there's a shadow in the room here that's neither yours nor mine,
and I wish somewhere you would draw the line,
Her cat, her clothes, the letters you send,
the pain it all causes me; when will it end?
This shadow is hard to ignore I find,
Hell, not to see it I'd have to be blind,
How can she have such hold over you,
after all this time that you've been through?
All the time you compare me to her,
and truthfully, sometimes I wish I were,
Even looking at things reminds you and the shadow grows,
and it can't be ignored because everyone knows,
But what you don't know is it presses on my heart,
and with every memory you bring up of her it tears me apart,
"Everyone leaves" you always say,
but I'm the one that's trying to stay,
The day after Valentines, you wrote her a letter,
filled with "I love You"s instead of "Fuck you. I've got someone better!",
It wasn't the only one you've sent and I'm sure it won't be the last,
why won't you just leave it all in the past?
Only you can say, "Hey I'm fine, shadow just go.",
but do I think you ever will? The answer is no,
I have never thought of leaving you and never would willingly,
but there's a shadow in the room with us and you should know it's killing me.

I really, really like this poem. It is bitter and full of emotion which is what I love the most. My main concern is the length; it gets to the point where you just start rambling on about something and the readers want to hear your next point. Just remmember that sometimes less is more. Another thing I would like to add is that you could consider dividing this poem into stanzas/paragraphs. Its easy to follow and would benifit the length issue as each stanza is introducing a new point which would allow you to be aware of how many lines you have devoted to the one point. Over all well done!
-Blossom xx

So I like the continous metaphor in this poem. The title is Shadow in the room and the thing the voice is describing is in fact the shadow in the room. I think this could be a really impressive poem but the lack of stanza's make it a little hard to read and I'd read through it a bit and fix the rhythm issues in the stanzas; some of the lines get a little too wordy and ruin the over all flow to your poem. Anyway this is pretty good but it could be be better and I'd advise you to revise it some, but other than that not bad.