Charmed Soul

Every time I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love.

Every time you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty...

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

foxy wrote:Everytime I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love.

Everytime you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty...

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

Foxeyyy!! Hey!!

Don't kill me for this ut it's abit depressing but beautifuly written your very talented !

Keep writing and keep coming in chat :p

RIS!

rebelinsilence wrote:

foxy wrote:Everytime I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love.

Everytime you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty...

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

Foxeyyy!! Hey!!

Don't kill me for this ut it's abit depressing but beautifuly written your very talented !

Keep writing and keep coming in chat :p

RIS!

Hihihiihihi rebs hun, I don't hate you for this. Everyone has their own opinion, and you are right it's very sad. Do not worry I'll stay in chat, see you there ^^

Hey there, Foxy. I truly love this so much. You've got some freakin' talent!

Nitpicks:

Everytime 2 Words (Every time) I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love. Very beautiful

Everytime Again, two words you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty... "The thirsty" what?

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

Great job, Foxy. Keep writing and PM me for anything.

~Freak

CreativeFreak wrote:Hey there, Foxy. I truly love this so much. You've got some freakin' talent!

Nitpicks:

Everytime 2 Words (Every time) I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love. Very beautiful

Everytime Again, two words you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty... "The thirsty" what?

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

Great job, Foxy. Keep writing and PM me for anything.

~Freak

Hiihihih thank you freak, this is very appreciated. As for the thirsty, it's a simile. It means, the thirsty would do anything to satisfy his thirst. It's the same for me with my lost lover's life. Did you understand?

Oh, I get it now. Pff. Wow, I should have seen that.
Thanks.

CreativeFreak wrote:Oh, I get it now. Pff. Wow, I should have seen that.
Thanks.

Hihihihih you are welcome

Every time I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love.

Every time you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty...

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

I wouldn't say depressing, but that's because I love this to pieces. It's more emotive than several other things that I have seen. It's also incredibly beautifully written. Well done.

- GhostlyImpressions.

I like your emotional style of writing; it is very nice, neat and tidy with no fluff to fill it in. It sounds honest, and I like the structure- the style is like a poem, but the structure is like a story. Very nice.

GhostlyImpressions wrote:

Every time I hear your euphonic whispers in my ear, my soul drags me to the bottom of the ocean behind the soft sand until my breath becomes labored, and my mind suffocates in your love.

Every time you fill my ears with your melodious words, I force myself to kill the soul with the inconceivable desires. Prodigious are thy words that drive me insane, and wondrous is thy embrace that drives me to suicide. I adore you, I want you like the thirsty...

You, my love, are the infirmity and you're the remedy. What may be the answer if you are the question itself? The words " I love you" tear me like leaves on a spring's day.

Take my soul to yours today and forever, for I shall not stand the distance separating us... Take me as a soul, a body,and a heart so that the passion imprisons me, and the unconscionable desires in your eyes seduces the purity in mine.

Let the outrageous waves of everlasting love sway and lose me behind the nameless, behind the endless horizon , for I shall not resist. My soul is like the drunk running after your voice not knowing what might await it...

Let me devote every promise to you, allow me to bestow every wish to every single beat of your heart, for your name, iterated within every blink, secures my grief and throws it amongst the forgotten pages of denied history. I will spend the rest of my days and nights pledging to satisfy your loneliness.

I wouldn't say depressing, but that's because I love this to pieces. It's more emotive than several other things that I have seen. It's also incredibly beautifully written. Well done.

- GhostlyImpressions.

yes you are right, my point of writing this was not to express sadness, but to expose the deep emotions taking over my addicted heart (addicted to my lover) . Thank you for your review it is truly appreciated.

megefford wrote:I like your emotional style of writing; it is very nice, neat and tidy with no fluff to fill it in. It sounds honest, and I like the structure- the style is like a poem, but the structure is like a story. Very nice.

well, to be honest, I cannot write a perfectly structred poem, nor a complete story. Thus, I tried to combine my weakness into a powerful thought, and I got those pieces which I still cannot find a certain name for... >.>

However, thank you for your review, I am really glad that you have liked it ^^