Peter Pan

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I first met him on a moonlit night,
When he found me in the crowd,
And sat beside me.
He smiled--
A smile so wicked, yet so kind--
And kissed my hand,
As if he'd known me forever.

I didn't understand him;
I didn't know who or even what he was.
All I knew was, he was different.
His voice was sweeter,
His movements swifter,
His lips colder,
Than anyone I'd ever met.
Whether consciously or not,
He wove his enchantments.

I climbed out my window,
And ran down the street,
And met him underneath the lamplights.
He spirited me away,
Through the city, beside the river,
And out onto the bridge.
Then he took my hand,
And we danced--
We ran--
We flew.
He spun me around and around,
Till the world was spinning and I was still,
Lying in his arms,
Safe, and yet not so.

I asked him who he was,
But he just smiled and darted away.
"I'm Peter Pan," he said,
As he skillfully evaded me.
"I'll never grow up."
I asked him if he'd take me to Neverland,
But he just laughed and said,
"First you have to believe."

We stood on the cliff overlooking the river,
With the wind in our hair,
And the golden lights of the city below,
And the silver lights of the stars above.
He looked into my eyes,
And I caught a glimpse of all the mysteries in his,
Sunken far beneath the blue,
Casting shadows to the surface.
He kissed me, softly at first,
Then ardent, aching.
Far away, the moon sank toward the horizon.
It was hopeless;
He would never grow up,
But I was bound to mortality.

He held me as we looked out
At the fading stars,
Alone at the crown of the world.
And leaning close--
His marble lips just brushing my hair--
He whispered,
"Welcome to Neverland."
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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I love it!!! Peter Pan is one of my favorite stories. There have been so many different takes on the story, and I love your perspective. There are a couple of spots that I thought could use some tweaking in the rhythm because they come out sounding a little awkward, but overall I thought it was great.

it's true when they say you don't know what you have until he's gone.




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theXunseen wrote :I love it!!! Peter Pan is one of my favorite stories. There have been so many different takes on the story, and I love your perspective. There are a couple of spots that I thought could use some tweaking in the rhythm because they come out sounding a little awkward, but overall I thought it was great.


I agree with theXunseen. I also love it! Peter Pan is one of my all time favorite stories. This is a great poem. All in all, I just love it. Keep writing because you can write. Tell me if you write anything more because I enjoyed reading your writings.

Good luck and keep writing,

Alicia.
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this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i absolutly love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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hello! I loved this. It had a sense of nostalgia. The tone of it was wonderful and the imagery was top notch. Peter Pan is one those stories that you neve tire of. The poem painted a wonderful picture. I like the perspective that you wrote it in as well. Wonderful job.
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Warrior Princess wrote:He would never grow up,
But I was bound to mortality.

He held me as we looked out
At the fading stars,
Alone at the crown of the world.
And leaning close--
His marble lips just brushing my hair--
He whispered,
"Welcome to Neverland."


These are my favorite. I love the title, this entire poem is a masterpiece! You played with the storyline well, although I do think this an amazing poem, I believe you could do better. Do not get offended I have more to offer. I think you should add a couple more things. Such as Tinkerbelle <-- she could be a jealous one who doesn't want him to take your character to Neverland. Or use the Lost Boys who make fun of Peter and make him "dart away". Again these are just some suggestions. You are a very creative writer and this is an amazing piece, in fact I think you should send this into some company to publish. That is how good I think it is.

Great job, and Good day!

-Soggy
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Thanks you everybody! :) Actually, though I named this poem "Peter Pan" it's really only about that particular story in a metaphorical sense. It's really about my brief romance with a certain guy, and it was kind of our little pretend secret that he was Peter Pan and he could take me to Neverland.
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.



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