Long Fuzzy Socks

What do you think? I came up with it in about ten minutes during class.

Long Fuzzy Socks
O, long fuzzy socks,
what would life be without you?
Let me count the ways.
My toes would be cold.
My feet would freeze.
My calves, unfashionably plain.
The world would be colorless;
school would be boring
although, it already is.
I love you long fuzzy socks
for all the things you do.
I love you even more
because you match my shoes!

TheWriters wrote:
Long Fuzzy Socks I would take this out.

This is such a cute poem I loved it. I can just picture it being in a kid's book Keep writing.

Wish I could have actually helped,

A. S.

Aww!
I loved this poem. It is awesomely cute and light-hearted!
I can also imagine this in a kids' book (:
There isn't really anything to criticise, so I'm sorry I couldn't help, but it should be encouraging that this review is all smiles.
Keep on writing, and God bless you and your long fuzzy socks,
Ignis (:

The title was pretty much the definition of awesome! Juts one question though... how would the world be colorless and school be not boring with these socks? It's a bit weird! Still, it's a really cute poem. It's not quite long fuzzy sock weather -- at least not here! -- but your poem will endure forever!

The poem was so cute! The flow of it was a bit choppy but then again you'd have to be a super writer to make a long sock poem totally rhyme!!! Loved it!!!

TheWriters wrote:What do you think? I came up with it in about ten minutes during class.

Long Fuzzy Socks -------> I would omit this
O, long fuzzy socks,
what would life be without you?
Let me count the ways.
My toes would be cold.
My feet would freeze.
My calves, unfashionably plain.
The world would be colorless; ------> the world would not be colorless without these socks... this is misleading.
school would be boring -----> How would school be any less boring without these socks?
although, it already is.
I love you long fuzzy socks
for all the things you do.
I love you even more
because you match my shoes!

----------> Not too crazy about this ending... I think you could think of one better...








It's good... for a poem about socks. I think you could work on it. Don't think I'm being mean just trying to help!