Purple - Chapter 2, Part 2

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Hey Carli

So I just finished reading this and I think it's the best chapter yet. I mean, there was so much progression and emotion mixed into here and the flow was very nicely executed as well. Although, there were a few choppy transactions, such as you just bump from one scene to the next, maybe add a '~~~' or a '-----' so we know it's going to a different scene or something.
Anyways, now I'm rooting for Archer because he seems nice and funny
Hopefully things go okay for the both of them... I like her life is confusing and just goes on like she really wants someone to make her feel...alive? Wanted? I can feel her sorrow and I can feel her excitement every time she gets close to her goal, I find myself rooting for at the end.
Well, I'm sorry this is a total waste of a review. I mean, your style of writing is very different and I've never read anything close to it so I'm a bit confused to how I should comment on it. Plus, it's your preferred choice of style and there's nothing I can really do about that besides give you some tips
Anyways, I liked the chappy *thumbs up*
I'll be waiting for the next!

~Pink

Hey Carls,
It's me again .This was really good and I enjoyed reading it. It has gotten a lot better from your first story and there really isn't much that I have to review. I like how Cora is desperate to have a boy friend so she is like stalking Archer (It makes the story fun to read.) Also Cora and Archer seem like a really cute couple for each other! I just wanted to say that you are sort of leaving out characters now. Libbie and Miyah and a few other characters are sort of disappearing from the story so that's not good. Other than that great story and it has turned out really good!

-lilgreendots