??!? -_-

Hmm, ah… tch; neh?
Ooh! Ehehe.
Oh? Gah – tsk-tsk-tsk. Fshuuuuuuu.
Bah..! Huh? Wha..?

Whoa.
catatonic Gertrude Stein eats lemon curry?
… kekekekeke!
Ahaha! Ah! Ah..! Ah… eeeh.
Phew. Meh, nyeh, blah.
Boo – geh.
Mmm, nyam-nyam:
Uhm, ahm, ohm? Nom.
Bum-ba-bum-ba-bon-bon krak!
Alo! ? Oh-ho? Hoi
tsip tsip.

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I'm going to try my hand at reviewing this.

I can't really critique syntax or grammar because, well, the poem is essentially onomatopoeia. As interesting as it was, that makes it difficult for constructive criticism. However, I will say the flow of the poem was pretty great, I enjoyed that. I can't tell if there is any deeper meaning, or if this is a nonsense poem. Either way, it's appealing in its...difference.

I'm sorry I can't be of much help, but yeah.

~Sporks

Hi, there! Welcome to the site!

Interesting poem; I agree with Sporks that it's kind of hard to criticize this, exactly. The language has kind of a joyful swoop to it, and the words are definitely original. I like the free, borderless feeling I get from this piece. I also enjoyed your explanation of the poem:

ilyaeelz wrote:Gertrude Stein eats lemon curry?!

Keep writing! Hope to see you around the forums.


--Glim

Hey there, ilyaeelz, and welcome to the Young Writers Society.

First off, I agree with Spork and Glim; I don't know if I can truly give you a good critique on this, dear. It's something that is very unique, and I don't want to bother with it. It does have a joyful impression, though.

However, I found this piece a bit odd, by usual standards. I just haven't seen anything like it.

Still, keep writing and I'll see you around.

~Mizz

I really hope this is a joke Poem, if not...well.....

Not much I can say. I mean, this is hardly even...anything at all. You can;t review gibberish, because you can't even understand it. I'm not going to say it's interesting, because it isn't. Maybe it is a special kind of poetry...but it is gibberish, and I can;t see any point in it.

Sounds like something my baby cousin would write. So I hope this is a joke/you didn't put forth effort.

On the contrary, Bolt, I think this is a brilliant poem. The "nonsense" of it does have a point, as explained in the final line. It's innovations like this that distinguish writers from the mundane and make us all think outside the box. Welcome to YWS, ilyaeelz, I am looking forward very much to reading your other pieces, especially if they are as interesting and unique as this was.

This is five kinds of awesome. I loved reading it -- out loud, of course. My only nit-pick is that some of the things would probably not be said, just because they sound awkward. By that, I mean that I wouldn't be able to say it because I suck at pronunciation. (Like, kekekeke? My lazy tongue would die.)

Also, the ending is kind of beautiful.

All and all, it kind of reminds me of a Calvin and Hobbes comic. The whimsy is there.

This poem is great! The title drew me in straight away and I wasn't dissapointed. xD I loved this poem, the way it flowed was really good, and writing nonsense poems is so much harder than most people thing. The end was lush as well.

Keep writing,

~Crimson

I don't think there's anything to say about this.... I can see why this got as many reviews as it did. The title was weird.

ilyaeelz wrote: ... kekekekeke!
Ahaha! Ah! Ah..! Ah... eeeh.
Phew. Meh, nyeh, blah; boo – geh.
Mmm, nyam-nyam

Pure poetry
~Ladypurple

Gertrude Stein eats lemon curry.

XD No comment on this, really. I don't know why I liked it, nor why I'm replying to it.

I like this. It's interesting, out of the box, definitely something people won't think of to write for a poem.

A suggestion for future ideas--perhaps using abbreviations as a poem? Ttyl? Afk? Nyob? Another idea you could play around with to confuse and befuddle readers~