For my best friend

The thing between us,
It is special.
It is more than friendship.
It is more than being a boyfriend to me.
This is more special!
You mean more for me!
Than almost everybody else,
You are like my family,
But than different.
You are my best friend,
But you are better than best.
I don't want to let you down.
I wish I could solve all of your problems,
In just 2 seconds.
But I can't.
I don't know exactly what you feel.
I can only guess.
However, I try to help you
As good as I can.
My heart will break,
When I loose you.
I love you!
You're my best friend!
You're my family!

I think your use of "than" is grammatically incorrect. Should it be "then"? I don't really understand the sentance.
Your break points are confusing, and your ideas are broken apart in such a way, it makes your writing piece slightly hard to understand. You were quite repetative, as well, decreasing the quality of your writing piece.

Normally, I'm all for punctuation, but in your case, your punctuation is causing you to have awkward, unnatural break points that don't have any sort of sentance fluency.

This piece was catagorized under 'lyrical poetry', I believe. That's an incorrect catagory. A, by definition, "lyrical poem" has a rhyming scheme, which your poem does not.

My overall impression of this piece is... I dunno. I think it's really lame. All you did was write sentances with weird breaks in them and repeat yourself. I wouldn't call this a poem.

First of all, LOSE THE EXCLAMATION POINTS. They are cheesy. The poem could use some spicing up, it's a bit cliche as it is. Try expressing the feeling in a more original way, perhaps with more figurative language.

Well, what everyone else said! The only other flaw that I can see is that "2" should be "two." Depending on style, using digits instead of writing out the numbers begins at either ten, twenty, or 100. I, personally, write out numbers like "fifteen," but you may say "15" if you like. I hope this helps!

- Abigail

Hi I didn't really have time to red the other comments but I will tell you what I think.
I understand the point of the poem but I think you should definitely make some changes.
It would be helpful for you to subdivide it in stanza's and try to reduce certain repetitions e.g.

"It is special.
It is more than friendship.
It is more than being a boyfriend to me.
This is more special!"

Also I don't believe the exclamation mark is needed.

I think it would be good if you were to change the it is in the first part to it's. You could also describe more the relationship with your best friend and the person himself/herself. In addition to this you could use forms of writing like similitude and metaphor which usually helps the poet to make the reader more interested and put their point across.

I can't deny that to me the poem lacks of flow and it's confusing in the sense that it doesn't have a consistency and it kinds of reminds me of a declaration more than a poem. You should definitely expand on this sentence for example:

"The thing between us,
It is special.
It is more than friendship.
It is more than being a boyfriend to me.
This is more special!
You mean more for me!"

Here:

"I don't know exactly what you feel.
I can only guess.
However, I try to help you
As good as I can."

I think you should clear more. I mean the person is you best friend or more but you don't understand how he/she feels? Or do you mean that this is a difficult moment for him/her in which you are not able to get through his/her mind so why don't you say what you feel and what you precept when you try to make him/her to open up to you.

Again the exclamation mark is not needed.

Also I don't really like this part:

"I love you!
You're my best friend!
You're my family!"

Hope I was helpful and good luck