Lullaby Of Your History

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I just found this and I guess I wrote it for my history class when we were talking about immagration. It was an assignment to write a story and or poem about it. Enjoy!


Hush now my child
Listen as the wind sings
The haunting lullaby
Of your history

A woman at the bow
Of a magnificent ship,
The wind blowing from the west
From her new home.

A man working in the fields
To feed himself
His face glistens with sweat
As he listens to the strange language around him.

The woman is put to work
In a factory
All because she cannot understand
What the others say.

Their dreams seem so far away
Their hopes forever gone.
But the moon still shines to remind them
Of how much better it is than the plagued land they left behind.

In the rain as she walks through the street
A man steals her fresh bread
And making her fall
And he sees her.

The man in the fields runs to her,
And helps her stand up,
Their eyes meeting
And their language matching.

Months later they are wed
But they still know
there will be many to feed
In the years to come.

A baby girl is born under a leaky roof
The cries making a smile appear
For the first time in months on their faces,
And for a moment, they forget of hunger and of pain.

Hush now my child
Remember these words
Before we fade away
For this is your history.
Bittersweet embrace
Fit or run in place
Don't leave me so thirsty
Or else hush this hurry
Weight on me
Weighs more than me
So wait with me and we'll stop crying


~Bittersweet by Flyleaf




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I think this is very original, I like it.

A woman at the bow
Of a magnificent ship,
The wind blowing from the west
From her new home.

The two "from"s here don't flow as well. Maybe a comma after "west".

But the moon still shines to remind them
Of how much better it is than the plagued land they left behind.

The last line here seems a little long, though it doesn't sound like it stands out much, actually.

Hush now my child
Remember these words
Before we fade away
For this is your history.

I really like this last stanza and the repetition of the "history" at the end.
Good job, I hope you got a good grade on this!
Do we not all agree to call rapid thought and noble impulse by the name of inspiration?
- George Eliot


"It takes ten times as long to put yourself back together as it does to fall apart."




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First of all, I like how you don't specify what country the man and woman are from. It makes the poem relatable to all ethnicities. I also like how you made the poem into a lullaby of sorts. As for nitpicks....

"And making her fall
And he sees her."

I think the wording was a little awkward there, mainly on account of the double "and."

"And for a moment, they forget of hunger and of pain."

I think you should take out the of's here. They don't really fit.

A very nice poem on the whole. Good job and keep writing!
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.



When life gives you lemons, make orange juice and leave the world wondering how you did it.
— Grace Helbig