I'm Not the One Getting Hurt

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I watch them,
Silently,
Quietly,
Not bothering to say anything more.

How ridiculous they look,
As they flounce about,
Flirting,
Twirling their hair.

And the boys,
Because they're only that,
They sneak a peck,
Try to hold hands under the table.

They waste the words,
Like "I love you" doesn't count.
They waste the kisses,
Like they don't mean a thing.

"Leah," they sigh,
"You wouldn't understand.
You've never been in love,
You wouldn't know how it feels."

"You haven't either!"
I try to shout out.
It's hormones flaring,
They're just naive.

But it's okay,
I'm sensible.
Always have been,
Always will be.

Middle school relationshipes,
They don't work out.
But will they listen to me?
No, they think I'm a downer!

Well they'll learn,
They'll soon figure it out.
Heartbreak may seem like a crime,
But they're the true robbers of childhood.

And when I'm all alone,
Reading my book,
They're texting their "boyfriends".
They don't have a care in the world.

But when they discover,
That I've been right this whole time,
They'll be sorry,
Because they never listened.

I may just be frustrated,
I may just be sad,
But I don't care,
I'm not the one getting hurt.


Please review, it really means a lot to me...
Last edited by iheartbooks on Sat Aug 21, 2010 12:41 am, edited 2 times in total.
"As the hungry are deprived of food, I am deprived of sympathy for those who deprive me of my sanity." ~Anonymous




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Greetings!

I found this submission to be packed with emotion as exemplified below.

I may just be frustrated,
I may just be sad,
But I don't care,
I'm not the one getting hurt.


With that said, I believe you completed an excellent dramatic poem. Ultimately, I liked it for four reasons. Emotion. Personality. Format. Topic Choice. All of which have been blended harmoniously. Well done and I hope you keep on writing.

Devil's Advocate:

Even if this is a dramatic poem, there might be the issue of too much uncontrolled emotion bubbling at the end into what could be potentially mistaken for a death threat. This is the main counter-argument to your dramatic poem.

Sincerely,
-Elitehusky




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DRAMATIC.
You know what? This was just like Titanic. Dramatic, deep and it made sense. So really, this was the opposite to Titanic.



I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed and that necessary.
— Margaret Atwood