Feelings for a Friend

Listen, I wasn't really sure how to break this up into stanzas since I wrote it like this first. If you have any ideas on stanzas do you think you could tell me in a review? Thanks

Ever have a friend who you thought you could trust?
Who you thought would never embarass you?
Who would hurt the person who hurt you, not be the one inflicting the pain?
I had someone like that.
I still have a few.
One changed though.
She went from making me laugh to making me practically hate her.
No, I don't hate her really, I just hate what she did.
Its not a joke anymore.
It isn't funny, can't she see?
Are the tears forming at the rims of my eyes so invisible?
And why is everyone going along with it?
What happened to the people I thought I could trust?
They've all disappeared.
This is what happens when I open up.
I let people in and all I got in return was pain.
My, my...I truly have forgotten what has happened before.
Now I have only a few.
Them, plus a hole in my chest where my heart used to be.
Great...just, great.

I had this happen many times. I love your work how it has your own personal twist in it. But as you asked, I tell you how I think you should break it up into stanzas. But most of your work breaking up the stanzas was remarkable. I have problems when it comes to stanzas myself, so this is just my opinion and you don't have to do it this way if you don't want to.

Who would hurt the person who hurt you, not be the one inflicting the pain?

I would break this stanza up creating

Who would hurt the person who hurt you?
Not be the one inflicting the pain?

No, I don't hate her really, I just hate what she did.

To create more a dramatic feel I would create do this

No, I don't hate her really,
I just hate what she did.

Great...just, great.

And again for me, I love drama, I would do this in another fashion

Great.
Just great.

Again, I'm not the number one writer in the world (I'm not even close) but those are just some suggestions. I actually kind of like it the way it is. It's more personal when you put in the stanzas. So do what you want to do with the stanzas, because the writer knows best! Again, I loved this poem! Keep writing!

Ok, here is how I think you should break it up...

Ever have a friend
who you thought you could trust?
Who you thought would never embarass you? < right here I think that you should change the word "embarass" to "hurt" because the poem is talking about that friend hurting you, not embarasing you...
Who would hurt the person who hurt you,
not be the one inflicting the pain?

I had someone like that.
I still have a few.
One changed though.
She went from making me laugh
to making me practically hate her.
No, I don't hate her really,
I just hate what she did.

Its not a joke anymore.
It isn't funny, can't she see?
Are the tears forming at the rims of my eyes so invisible?
And why is everyone going along with it?
What happened to the people I thought I could trust?

They've all disappeared.
This is what happens when I open up.
I let people in,
and all I got in return was pain.
My, my...I truly have forgotten what has happened before.
Now I have only a few.
Them, plus a hole in my chest where my heart used to be. < i think you could change it to " where my heart was before... to make it sound better
Great...just, great. < I think you should take this line out, it just takes away from the poem...

Over all, I like the poem. You can tell that this is something that you wrote about your own expereances, which is good!

~Rain~

Thanks you guys^^ That was really helpful, and I think I'll try combining your two methods a little. I like the stanza's Rain created but also like the drama TPak showed. Either way, thanks to both of you!

~mybrokenreality