See This Smile?

I always see phrases like "Silent Scream", and wanted to try writing something along those lines. But not like the normal things stemming from it. I don't know if I was really successful.



See this smile?
Right here?
On this grinning face?
Well my teeth are actually gritted,
Grinding and winding around my mouth
Suppressing my perpetual scream.
Those little laughs?
The ones from your bad jokes?
Well, those are actually
At the joke of life,
And how you all take it seriously.

Persephoneia wrote:See this smile?
Right here?
On this grinning face?
Well my teeth are actually gritted,
Grinding and winding around my mouth
Suppressing my perpetual scream.
Those little laughs?
The ones from your bad jokes?
Well, those are actually
At the joke of life,
And how you all take it seriously.

I'm not sure if it's just because I'm crazy, actually thought this was funny. I love this poem! I didn't see any errors that needed to be changed, it all looked fine to me.
If you need me to review anything else, shoot me a PM and I'll check it out!

~xX~Forsakinshadow~Xx~

Persephoneia wrote:I always see phrases like "Silent Scream", and wanted to try writing something along those lines. But not like the normal things stemming from it. I don't know if I was really successful.



See this smile?
Right here?
On this grinning face?
Well my teeth are actually gritted,
Grinding and winding around my mouth
Suppressing my perpetual scream.
Those little laughs?
The ones from your bad jokes?
Well, those are actually
At the joke of life,
And how you all take it seriously.

this was relly good! I really related to it. i love how you think it wll be a happy poem but its sad and full of anger. i love the part about the joke of life and ive hilighted the parts i love

Persephoneia wrote:I always see phrases like "Silent Scream", and wanted to try writing something along those lines. But not like the normal things stemming from it. I don't know if I was really successful.



See this smile?
Right here?
On this grinning face?
Well my teeth are actually gritted,
Grinding and winding around my mouth
Suppressing my perpetual scream.
Those little laughs?
The ones from your bad jokes?
Well, those are actually
At the joke of life,
And how you all take it seriously.

Yes I found it funnny too!
Lol It was very good though!
I enjoyed it alot.
I'm not much into poetry but this sparked it to a whole 'nother level dudee!