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Infinity

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Infinity:

Hugging every single star in the universe
in one giant grip
--squeeze--
and then kissing their foreheads good morning.

Hinting a single smile to the one you love
sending then soaring away
--whoosh--
and then having them fall back into your warmth.

Feeling the tickle of grass on your bare feet
in the middle of summer
--swish--
and then running as fast as you can.

Hearing someone's hilarious stories and doubling over
in fits of laughter
--giggle--
and then rolling right onto inspiration.

Taking everything in my life that I love,
that makes me happy,
--smile--
and multiplying it by one million, two thousand and four.

Point five.

Spoiler
the point five is part of the one million, two thousand and four... Point five. As in a half. Its meant to be humorous in some fashion, and is just a random number!
Last edited by icanbefixed on Sun Aug 01, 2010 4:16 pm, edited 1 time in total.
The hardest mountain to climb will have the greatest view. Everything at a different angle: memories serve as double vision, a view from the valleys as well as the precipice. But everything that goes up must come down.The descent from the peak will be twice as graceful & three times as difficult




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i didn't get the meaning of the point five at the end of the poem, or maybe im just being dense. i enjoyed reading the poem, it has good flow, and creates a lot of images. i would suggust using some more... spicy words, but that's just my opinion! =)
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LOVE IT! Excellent

icanbefixed wrote:
Infinity:

Hugging every single star in the universe
in one giant grip
--squeeze--
and then kissing their foreheads good morning.

Hinting a single smile to the one you love
sending then soaring away
--whoosh--
and then having them fall back into your warmth.

Feeling the tickle of grass on your bare feet
in the middle of summer
--swish--
and then running as fast as you can.

Hearing someone's hilarious stories and doubling over
in fits of laughter
--giggle--
and then rolling right onto inspiration.

Taking everything in my life that I love,
that makes me happy,
--smile--
and multiplying it by one million, two thousand and four.

Point five.

Spoiler
the point five is part of the one million, two thousand and four... Point five. As in a half. Its meant to be humorous in some fashion, and is just a random number!
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