Amber

Hey! Ok so while reading this I found a few mistakes that are a quick fix, everything I saw is noted in parentheses

I've had friends before I know that it's true
but I've never had a friend like that
a friend that's just like you.

your more like a sister than a cousin (You’re)
more like a confidant than a counselor. ( counsellor )

we're almost exactly the same
there's only a few things different.

you put up with my craziness
I put up with your quirks
because dear your my soul sister
and I love you oh so much.

I love your pretty face
your cute laugh
your funny jokes
your flirty attitude
your kind reprimands.

your advice I take to heart
and use it when I can.

there's no one else I'm this close to
no one else at all
I have five other siblings I know I do
but none of them are as close to me
as I am close to you.

we share secrets we giggle and shop
we brain storm in bed at at two AM (You have at twice)
and tell our stories and out thoughts.

you are the one I turn to when I need help
your role is my model and I like it that way
I know you'll never lead me wrong.

I know you love me too
because dear your my soul sister
and I love you oh so much

July felt so far away
I denied it would ever come
because best friend
that's when you leave
and I have to say good bye

good bye to your pretty face
and all our midnight talks
good bye to the laugh that makes me grin
the feeling of importance that you gave to me
the out-loud journal you use to be

the memories of the laugh attacks we had
memories of burning eyes and sides
as we laughed like never before

but different tears soaked your shoulder
as they fell fast from my eyes
you held me close as I cried and shook
like I never had in my life

you were leaving,
I couldn't stop you.

though I had laughed my hardest with you around
it felt wrong to do ever again.

we call and chat from day to day
but talks over phone aren't the same.

I can't see your pretty face
I can't feel your cute laugh
I can't see your expressive eyes
that magnify your meaning
when you tell me I'm just right
the way I already am

it'll only be a little while
a few months and that's it

but even that short time feels forever
when I know to my core
I'll never laugh or cry like I ever had before
unless your there to do it with me
and make me do it more.

I love you Amber.

~Mikey~

Ok now for what I thought! So overall I thought this very touching and very nicely done, besides all the small nit picky things I mentioned, Great Job =) Keep it up

Hi, Adeera! I'm here! This is a really beautiful poem... It makes me remember my big sister. But only one thing, I think every sentence should start with capital letters, okay? And, well... that's all I can say. Keep writing, because this was a good poem.

Hello there. This was written very well! I quite enjoyed reading it =)
Looking at what the others put I don't really have anything to say haha =/
But just I would let you know I liked this! I hope I get to read some more of your stuff soon!
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I really enjoyed reading this poem! The fact that you included so many personal details really helps bring out the love in
the poem. When reading the first few stanzas it made me think of my really close friends, and I like how those stanzas are general enough to apply to anyone. I did think stanzas five and six could have been combined since they rhyme, though. Overall, great poem, keep it up!

Ok, so I have to admit. I am not one much for poetry. That being said, I'm not sure how helpful my comment will be, but it feels good to see any feedback, right? I wasn't even intending to read any poems but the name of yours caught my eye. And I thought it was good! It was hard for me at first to see how it was supposed to flow, but once I got past the first few lines I just read it as if I were reading any story, letter, etc. I just focused on the words and I thought it had a great message! It made me thing of my life long friend.
One word of advice (and this may just be because I'm not a poet myself)- it was hard to tell what was supposed to rhyme and what was not. Or if any of it was supposed to!
But over all I thought it was a very good poem. I'm sure Amber loves it =)

Hello Adeera, it is MasterMind, I told you I would look at your works, and I do not lie.

I love to read poetry, and I enjoyed this piece because it had a great rhythm in the way you read it and it also rhymed. I like rhyming poems, and it just added to it's magnificence as a literary work of art. It also had very good descriptions and if I met this person I would surely recruit them into my force to rule to world. But it also portrayed emotion, and I Find myself wanting to ask questions about this person. All in all it was very good.

Until I read you again.

Hello!(: I don't know anything about poetry, but this was really good.(:

wow, you already have so many reviews what do you need my point of view for!
any way since you asked it, i should probably give it!
a very natural, heart-felt touchy poem you wrote. its like coming naturally from a teenage girls mind for the feeling of her friendship bond. no i really think you hit the right points of a true friendship. the work is good, the only thing wrong is yur trying to hard for it to rhyme, the rythem will be created automatically when the poem is well written. over all its a wonderful poem, with good sense of friendship and you really give us a flash back when we read it!
good job!
and yes i am your pal,
James

Thanks guys!

I'm glad you like it