The Crucifix is a Sex Toy

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I agree with everyone else! Don't like the title, and don't use Christianity to talk about sex. It's not polite. Keep on writing,

~Lindsay




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Thanks everyone! I EXTREMELY appreciate the constructive criticism and generous praise. :) I will do my best to improve.
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My dad's side of the family is Catholic, except him, so I got what you were saying within the poem and the comment explaining yourself. Also, I am Agnostic and live in Georgia with mostly Christians and Catholics, so I've learned things from both points of view, as you seem to have done as well. Overall, I love this!

There is, however, my one nitpick:

1) The title seems a little...shallow and immature in relation to the depth of the poem. Plus, I was trying to find how the poem directly connected to the crudity of the title. I know others have said this, but if it has continued to be said by various others, then it must be true as a general opinion. Also, though, I can understand if you're at a loss to what else you can name this.

Keep writing!
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