Dawn Reports: Power (1)

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Hey Dawn Report fans (all three of you) this is going to be 1 of 3 reports regarding 'power' as a stand-alone side project. However this is will still be in my 'Dawn Reports Style' of writing, yet this will not be considered the 11th report.


It is the reason for wars. It gives reasons to kill, to steal, to destroy. We betray to conquer, we hurt to achieve, we undergo to overcome. Some lose themselves in it, and invite greed in at the cost of everything else if only to have a little bit more. The goal is always in sight and never changing. Always consuming and never forgiving. Power. Always more power!
It is the thirst that is never quenched. It is the harlot who cannot find love as it corrupts and kills. It is the beast that cannot be slain. It is the 'end' the justifies the 'means'. It begins conspiracies and destroys dynasties. It is where the best intentions meet the worst falls. Without it there is nothing. With it there is nothing.

However, this lust cannot be helped for it is only human nature to always crave more. The irony in this funny quite actually; the more power one takes the less humanity one has left to show.


Once it is in the hands of men all hell can break loose, or it can bring about a golden age of peace.
I will continue this matter in my next report.

If you agree or disagree I would love to know.
As always comment, review, etc.
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It is the reason for wars. It gives reasons to kill, to steal, to destroy. We betray to conquer, we hurt to achieve, we undergo to overcome. Some lose themselves in it, and invite greed in at the cost of everything else if only to have a little bit more. The goal is always in sight and never changing. Always consuming and never forgiving. Power. Always more power!
It is the thirst that is never quenched. It is the harlot who cannot find love as it corrupts and kills.I don't get this bit. Is she unable to find love because of power..and why? This line is a bit vague. It is the beast that cannot be slain. It is the 'end' the that justifies the 'means'. It begins conspiracies and destroys dynasties. It is where the best intentions meet the worst fallsI dont get this bit.. Without it there is nothing. With it there is nothing. I really like this bit.

However, this lust cannot be helped for it is only human nature to always crave more. The irony in this funny quite actually; the more power one takes the less humanity one has left to show.


Once it is in the hands of men all hell can break loose, or it can bring about a golden age of peace.


I agree completely with what you have written. Especially this line,
the more power one takes the less humanity one has left to show.
The only line I kind of disagree with is,
it can bring about a golden age of peace.
How and whereabouts is it meant to bring this Golden age of peace? It seems a little bit far fetched but thats just my opinion.

I really like this report. And i enjoyed reading it.

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Hello there :)

Wow, I loved this. I felt the pouncing of "power" in every sentence. I have nothing to correct so I'll just comment.
I agree, some people if not everyone ( becuase there may be truth in that every single one of us has that desire to posess power) turn into a different kind of species when thinking of the great outcomes when in power. I don't think anyone or anything is going to be able to control this in the future of mankind.

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Hey I am going to review your work :D

i really like this sentence it really gives you a feel of where your going with this!
We betray to conquer, we hurt to achieve, we undergo to overcome.

Again this paragraph is really good, I am finding it difficult to pull anything apart! :D
Some lose themselves in it, and invite greed in at the cost of everything else if only to have a little bit more. The goal is always in sight and never changing. Always consuming and never forgiving. Power. Always more power!

I am not sureI get this, because it doesn't make sense.
Without it there is nothing. With it there is nothing.

This sentence needs to be rephrased!
The irony in this funny quite actually; the more power one takes the less humanity one has left to show.


Overall I think this is really good and the use of vocabulary and sentence structure is excetional.
I am looking forward to your next report.
I find this such an intruiging idea, and I totally see what you are hinting at!
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