Impossible Understanding

Hi fireandice!
THIS IS YOUR FIRST REVIEW!!!!!
Alright, so this is a very short poem and I think it can be expanded but....
the first line is a little to long for my tastes so I'd let the last "understood" have its own line....
so the second and 4th lines rhyme so is this a rhyming poem or not? Because no other lines rhyme...
so these are my corrections (I'll write your version than mine)
Yours:
to understand what can't be understood
its very hard to say the least.
Like making bread rise,
Without the yeast,
Impossible...
Mine:
To understand what can't be
understood,
Its very hard to say the least.
Like making bread rise,
without the yeast
Impossible to say...
Other than that, I LOVED IT!!!!! Its a very thought provoking poem and its very interesting.... have a great day!!!!!
CHOW FOR NOW,
sionarama

Haha thanks! Yes it is a short poem, because it is supposed to be short and to the point. And yes it is a rhyming poem, just the format doesn't need any more rhyming because it is so short. Also I kinda like the way the poem is slowly growing smaller. And if I added more words with impossible, it would take the emphasis building up to the word impossible. But thanks for your review!

FireandIce326 wrote:Haha thanks! Yes it is a short poem, because it is supposed to be short and to the point. And yes it is a rhyming poem, just the format doesn't need any more rhyming because it is so short. Also I kinda like the way the poem is slowly growing smaller. And if I added more words with impossible, it would take the emphasis building up to the word impossible. But thanks for your review!

To this poem which is actually a paragraph long, I wouldn't call a poem. I am not being offensive but I would just recommend you to expand it. But if you like it this way it is okay, but this can't be call a poem.

What is your definition of a poem exactly?

hmm i like it, makes you think.

I actually mean to say that this is just too short to be a poem. There should be at least two paragraphs I believe. But for one's interest I would not ask you to change it.