Chavland

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This is good - of course, when I think of 'chav's' I think of teenage girls from Newcastle and Manchester riding BMX bikes donned in adiddas tracksuits and mackenzie t'shirts, with gelled back hair, large gold hooped earrings, layers of gold chains and lollipops in their mouths. Thankfully we don't have a lot of them where I live.

Good job!

*coco

Very truthful. I like it. I know a lot of girls like this I had a friend kinda like that and now we grew apart because of some of the things we did. She would do things and ask me to do it too but I didn't want to. Anywho nicely done. Keep writing!
~Ladypurple

Hey there. I thought this was pretty good The words were good and so was what you were saying. BUT even though it had the rhyming, and you broke it up kinda, I feel it didn't have a flow, therefore the fact that it had rhymes didn't make it seem like it rhymed. Maybe you wanted it that way but it seemed.... blahish to me.

I didn't really enjoy this poem, as it seems you have slipped into the narrow minded view that all 'chavs' are bad and smoke and drink, many of my friends are considered 'chavs' and one doesnt smoke at all or drink as he aspires to become a boxer, and his aggression is due to a bad childhood, where as lots of people who use the term 'chav' are more privilged people. I wear tracksuits, live in a council estate and some deem me to be a chav, but if its true i'm still sane and wise. But I do agree with some aspects as people do go and live life this way thinking it looks cool, or makes them cool so I think that your poem is a tiny bit accurate but from where I come from its all people have grown up learning and don't know much better. I despise the use of the word chav because it was originally used to describe an avid follower of fashion and not 'council house and violance as people say now. But that is only my personal view and i'll read some of your other work to see if I enjoy that because the way this is written is good but I think the tallent of your writing to me is drowned out by the stereopying. But I think you are a good writer and have very good potensial so keep on writing