How can you not like this? It's amazing! Creative, good, amazing!

Congratulations! The Lord has blessed you with a successful post! ( I liked your prayer at the begining too)

I really really really LOOOOVED this!! Emensly! It's amazing. Short, sweet, and true. I can't beleve this is your first poem! It's amazing!

Keep on writing!
-Ruth

Not bad but I think you should make it deeper. I don't usually like poems that don't rhyme but this one isn't half bad Keep up the good work!

Awesome. i dont read poems that don't rhyme ether but im hooked on this

Well, I guess that's it then. And I also guess you can write poetry. Well done.

Are you serious! This is the first poem you've written!? Well then this is really, very good. You've got a good structure, you used punctuation, made a good flow and you "show" instead of "telling" - All of these things are things things beginners usually miss and the fact that you've grasped it all is very impressive!
I love the simplicity of the poem, and yet it is very descirptive and vivid! All together, I really loved it and if this is really your first poem I can't wait to see what your poetry is like when you've done a few and developed as a poet!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Now, I never EVER read poems (until now that is). I never liked them unless they were in the form of lyrics to a song. I'm not a poet, I like to read novels and short stories.

BUT, I must say I really LOVE this one. I think you just got me interested in something I never thought I'd like. You're poem is simply beautiful. I am currently undergoing a very hard, torturous affair right now, and after reading this, I couldn't agree more.

Forbidden love is the apple you cannot bite,
The skin you cannot touch,
And the air you dare not breath.

You're first paragraph thingy (sorry, I don't know what it would be called. Never bothered with this stuff before) really hits the spot on the physical restrictions of a forbidden love. While every paragraph thingy has at least one line that could be taken in a physical sense, I believe this one really gets to me. In a forbidden love, you feel many things, including the occasional lust. You desire the forbidden body, the comfort, the solace it offers.

It is the song you cannot sing,
The lips you cannot taste,
And the dream you dare not dream.

Your second paragraph thingy seems to be more focused on the emotional level of love. I never really was good at explaining emotional things, as I have always secluded myself from expressing my emotions or partaking in listen to others rant about their emotions. But in my personal view of the emotions that love offers (sorry for not explaining in more detail), I believe this restricts love. It makes it... Dare I say it... Forbidden (Heh heh)

The rest seem to sort of blend the first two together.

I'm terribly sorry if this review isn't what people expect it to be, but I simply love your poem and couldn't go on my way without saying SOMETHING. PLEASE, I BEG OF YOU: Keep me posted on future poems that you conjure up! This is simply amazing. It's hard to believe that this is your first poem. Too good.

Good job! It was really cute! Most poems get boring at the end but yours didn't. Keep writing!

You have me longing for a forbidden love too. I liked, no loved your poem. You're a natural .

This is pretty good for a complete beginner I have to say. It didn't rhyme, but it didn't really need to and I like the way you associated all the senses with Love. Magnifying it. Well done, keeping writing poems, the more you do it the better you'll get!