Let Us Write

Let us write a melody and sing it together in song,
Let us move to a new beat and then dance along.

We shall write a sonnet an ode to good fortune,
All of us shall write a beautiful love poem,
and we all will laugh in tune.

-M.H. Darling

This is not a poem you read everyday, I found a message about peace and living in harmony in it.

In the first two lines, the rhyme seems effortless, but the rhythm seems a little off.

kitrosemon13 wrote:Let us write a melody and sing it together in song,
Let us move to a new beat and then we'll dance along.

In the second set of lines, I think the first line should be broken into two. It flows better.

Keep writing!

If this is not yours... I dont advise you post it on here. It is not your own work. Thus, its note really allowed.

Unless it is yours, then tell me and I will aplogize for being stupid. XD

Im not actually sure where you'd post other peoples reviews... :/

No, I wrote this by myself. (: I do not copy others, I think it is a bit trashy.

Sorry

M.H.Darling sounded like an author I knew!

what first got me to read this was your title, no offense but i was let down.
you could do a lot better.