Ben my fine feathered fellow, could you please help me out with this poem I've written here: work.php?id=100311
I plan on submitting it to Kokopelli (It's a literary magazine consisting of the best writing from students) so it's kind of a big deal to get in it. I've already submitted my short story "The Tick Tock Train," which I've heard has been excepted *happy dance* but the editor really wants me to throw in poetry. So please do not hold back on critiquing and rip it to pieces if necessary. Thanks!
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