Shifters: Chapter 13

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Our breaths became visible as we exhaled in the cold night air. We walked slowly across the small parking lot, our legs stiff from a two hour drive, towards the old church that towered before us.

“Why didn’t we just fly here?” I complained. “It would’ve been a lot faster to come all the way to Gatineau!”

“Because it drains a lot of energy to do so,” Ben looked sideways at me, “and you’ve never even flown before.”

“So?” I said, knowing as I said it how lame a retort it was.

We made our way up the front steps and stopped short of the door. “You know what to do?” he asked.

I nodded. “I got it the first three times you said it.” I moved to open the door and stopped. “How do you know about this anyways? It’s not like you were in the area to hear about it.”

“The Masters have infinite sources.” He gestured to the double brown doors, a sign that the conversation was over.

“Fine,” I mumbled, entering the church. It was just like any other gothic style catholic church; big arches adorned the walls, stained glass windows were on each side of the small room as well as religious sculptures and paintings, wooden benches stood in rows throughout the room. Two doors were on either side of the center stage at the far end.

Ben and I strolled down the rows, deciding to sit on the first one to the right. We bent slightly to make the cross sign over ourselves just before we sat. Immediately Ben went down on his knees, hands clutched together before him as if in prayer. I found it funny since I knew for a fact he was Jewish. But for the time being, he would play the part.

Then a lone figure dressed in a robe came out from the door on our right. Being the only visitors at this late hour, the priest had nothing better to watch than us and so he did. His soft white hair and beard were the only signs of aging he held, the rest of his skin barely showing any wrinkles.

I turned to look at him, mustering the saddest look I could possibly give. He focused his withering gaze solely on me. With my eyes, I gestured to the confessional that was near him. He glanced to it, and turned back to me with a short smile and nod.

I stood up and got out of the bench while the priest made his way towards the brown and red confessional box. Opening the left door, he entered it, and as I finally reached it, I entered through the other door. It was a small space, having only a little stool to sit myself on. I shut the door, sat down and looked through the wire screen that connected the two areas. Since there wasn’t much light coming through the confessional, I could just make out his face, but nothing more.

“Tell me; what ails you, my child?”

“I am having thoughts of murder.”

The priest leaned his face closer to the screen. “Do you truly wish to act on these... thoughts? Is it truly in your desires to kill someone?”

“Oh, but you misunderstand me, Father,” I said in my most innocent tone, “I wish to kill demons, not humans.”

“Demons?” he croaked.

“Why yes. In fact,” I dropped the innocent tone in my voice, “I intend to send you back to the hell right now!” My dagger pierced the wired screen and imbedded itself in his face.

The demon didn’t scream, having died instantly. Removing my dagger, I let its human form lean limply against the confessional’s wall. Repulsively, I reached down just enough to wipe the black blood off of my dagger and on the demon’s head. Once clean to my satisfaction, I placed it back in its sheath at my thigh. Then I grabbed the glass vial attached at my belt, uncapped it and extended my hand through the holed screen to let one single drop fall onto the corpse. Recapping it immediately, I watched the body slowly disintegrate, as if eaten by some invisible termites. Within seconds, the body had completely disappeared, along with the blood that had splattered on the confessional’s walls, floor and my arm. I sighed, happy to have no more yucky blood on me.

Inspecting the inside for anything, and satisfied to find nothing, I made my way out of the confessional and to Ben. He was leaning against the bench he’d been sitting on earlier, arms crossed. “And?” he asked.

“It’s done. You? Any problems?”

He shook his head. “Nobody comes here on week nights, especially not a Wednesday. That’s why it was so easy for the demon to kill humans; they were alone and there was no one in the vicinity.”

We walked back towards the door. “Bastard,” I sneered. “Posing as a priest; how despicable.”

Making our way out the door, we strolled casually, just in case someone would pass by the dirt road and spot us. Hurrying would make us look suspicious. And that wouldn’t be good if someone filed a missing person’s and we were suspects. “You know, it’s weird how the very people we try to protect could very well turn on us and throw us in jail.” I sighed.

“They would if they got the chance. That’s why we take precautions; to not give them any.” He stopped by the co driver’s side of his grey Mercedes. “You can give me back the vial now.” He put up his palm, waiting.

I unhooked it from my belt and gave it to him. “That thing’s pretty cool,” I stated.

“Yup. Really useful to dispose of any corpses.” He twirled the vial carelessly between his fingers.

“Don’t do that!” I screeched, grabbing his hand. “Do you have a death wish?!”

“Don’t worry!” he said calmly, “this is white magic. It’s specifically made to attack demonic or other dark creatures’ blood. It wouldn’t affect you if it touched you.”

“I’m really sick of people saying ‘don’t worry’!” I admitted through clenched teeth, “Especially ‘don’t worry, be happy’. I think the next person who says that, I’m going to jump him right where he stands!” I swore.

“Calm down. No use getting yourself all worked up over it. Besides,” he opened the car door and gestured for me to get in, “we still have a long way to get home.”

* * *

Two miserable hours later, we found ourselves driving up to the house. I’d been dozing in and out the whole trip there, and by the time we arrived, my only thought was to go to bed... and possibly hibernate. By his sly grin, Ben thought my tired state was very amusing.

I didn’t.

Somehow I managed to drag myself into the house. Once there, I didn’t bother to remove my coat and shoes, muttering a “Good night” to Ben as I climbed the stairs. I had just stepped out of the staircase when I heard one of the bedroom doors open. Taking a few more steps, I realized it was the door to Greg’s room that had been opened and was now being shut carefully to make no sound. Only it wasn’t Greg coming out.

“Oh hell no! Tell me you didn’t,” I screeched!

“Shh!” CJ hissed, moving towards me.

“I can’t believe you!” I said angrily, although quieter.

“What’d I do?”

I crossed my arms and lifted one single brow. If her messed up hair, wrinkled clothes and swollen lips weren’t enough to illustrate she’d just had sex, it was pretty obvious by the display of hickeys on her neck. When I stared at her neckline for some time, she put a hand to cover it.

“All right, all right. I get it. But now I gotta go.” She sounded pressed and almost...scared.

“What’s wrong?”

“He’s insatiable, that’s what! We’ve been going at it for hours and he’s still not worn out! I mean, don’t get me wrong, he’s great in bed,” she smiled in remembrance, “but he’s an all-out kind of guy and I’m a one-time-only kind of girl.”

“Sounds like you’re getting what you deserve,” I stated not without amusement.

“Think what you want, I’m outta here-“

Suddenly the bedroom door swung open and out came Greg. CJ instantly tensed.

“Hey Crys! How’d your first great quest go?” he joked, coming up beside CJ.

“Went well,” I said, trying to ignore the fact he was only wearing boxers. “And you?”

“Doing great.” He smiled. “I was just wondering where CJ was.”

“I-I needed to talk to Crys for a minute,” CJ squeaked.

“Oh, really? Were you two done? ‘Cause we still have some unfinished business, CJ and I.” He wrapped an arm around her waist, pulling her closer to him.

She, on the other hand, was looking at me pleadingly. You could almost hear her pleading to me help me! Help me!

I smiled. “By all means, take her away.”

His face beamed just as CJ’s expression turned murderous. Scooping her up into his arms, he turned to look at me. “I hope you don’t need her tomorrow; she’s going to be very tired.” Then he winked and walked back to his bedroom with an angry CJ.

“That is way too much information,” Ben stated as he came to a halt beside me. Then, when a loud gasp could be heard from the bedroom, he moved quickly to his bedroom. “I need to find my earmuffs,” he growled just as he shut the door.

As much as I was glad to have had CJ caught in her own little games, I definitely didn’t want to stick around to hear about it. So I followed Ben’s lead, heading straight for my room.

If it was even possible, I felt more tired than I did before. That’s probably why it took me a few seconds to notice the figure sitting in my chair in the corner. I got a sudden adrenaline kick, yet chose to ignore it long enough to pull off my shoes and coat and throw it towards my laundry basket by the door.

“What’s up?” I asked casually.

“Nothing much,” Tony replied. “Did the round go well?”

“Yeah, everything went smoothly.”

A round was what they called when they went hunting for anything. It was more subtle than saying a mission or quest, although they still joked about it. That way, if any unwanted people happened to overhear, it seemed as though we were talking about any ordinary job.

“Good. Look I need to talk to you.” He moved forward in the seat.

I sat down on my bed. “What’s wrong?” I could tell by the tone of his voice something wasn’t right.

“There have been rumours,” he said simply.

“Don’t talk in riddles, Tony. I can take whatever it is.”

He sighed, raking a hand through his hair. “There have been rumours for some time that Frederick was plotting against The Masters. Apparently, he’s changed his target.”

“Huh? So what, now he’s after humans instead?”

“No. Well, yes. He’s always wanted to rule humans, but they pose no threat to him, so they remain at the bottom of the food chain. For now.”

“Okay... So who’s at the top of the food chain then?”

“You”

I froze, staring at the thread of my comforter I’d been toying with. “What?” I said finally, looking up at him.

He had mixed emotions crossing his features; one minute angry, the next sad. “He has this idea that you’re this...this... I don’t know! Some all powerful being or something!” He’d gotten up and was pacing in front of the bed, his emotion of the moment being anger.

“So he’s going to try and kill me now?” It was more a declaration than a question.

At my comment, he stopped pacing and came to sit down on the bed, drawing me to him for a hug when he did. He was squeezing me tight and sharing massive amounts of body heat. “I won’t let him touch you. I won’t let you out of my sight!”

As much as the thought warmed me, I knew he couldn’t actually do that. That’s when a thought crossed my mind.

Maybe I really should go into hibernation.
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Haha! Once again, I am first! (bite my dust everyone!! :twisted: )

You were right baby girl; I love this chapter!! I had action and tension and humour, woohoo!

Now, this nit-pick is just my personal opinion; do what you want with it.

The priest leaned his face closer to the screen. “Do you truly wish to act on these... thoughts? Is it truly in your desires to kill someone?”

“Oh, but you misunderstand me, Father,” I said in my most innocent tone, “I wish to kill demons, not humans.”

“Demons?” he croaked.

“Why yes. In fact,” I dropped the innocent tone in my voice, “I intend to send you back to the hell right now!”
Ok, I read this twice because it sort of bothered me and here is what I would write instead:
"...your desires to kill someone?"
"I wish to kill something, not someone."
"Some. . . thing?"
"Why yes. In fact," I dropped the innocent..."I intent to send you back to hell right now, demon!" *by the way, you added a 'the' too much right before 'hell'*

Anyway, just my opinion :D

“Oh hell no! Tell me you didn’t,” I screeched!
Um, your exclamation punction isn't at the right end of sentence lol

If her messed up hair, wrinkled clothes and swollen lips weren’t enough to illustrate she’d just had sex, it was pretty obvious by the display of hickeys on her neck
Um, I have issues with this. The way you described it sounds a serious petting session, not necessarily sex. Maybe you could say her shirt's on backwards or she's not wearing any pants. Or something.

I smiled. “By all means, take her away.”
Hahaha! Traitor friend!

Maybe I really should go into hibernation.
Maybe, but then the story would be boring without her lol

Ok, great chappy, can't wait for the next one!! We spoke of this this morning but you know how big of a fan I am of yours; your biggest!

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Hey! Nice chapter, lots of action, big plot change at the end, it's all great. I especially enjoyed CJ's escapades, and it's backfiring on her. She's such an amusing character.

Now, on to the review. :)

We walked slowly across the small parking lot, our legs stiff from a two hour drive, towards the old church that towered before us.

Believe it or not, towards is grammatically wrong. There should be no s, it's just toward.

My dagger pierced the wired screen and imbedded itself in his face.

Woah, where did this dagger come from? It seems there should have been some indication that she had a weapon, or some background action of her grasping it, touching it, something. Right now this action is very telling, try showing more of it. It'll be interesting. :)

I sighed, happy to have no more yucky blood on me.

This bothers me. She just killed someone, and then she says "yucky". That makes me think of a three-year old, not a killer. Though she is a teenager, and a hero rather than a killer, I don't feel yucky is the appropriate word for the situation.

“Okay... So who’s at the top of the food chain then?”

“You”

Why? I'm not really convinced by the explination given. Unless Frederick is an idiot (in which case, he shouldn't be a threat to anyone) then it doesn't seem like he would be threatened by Crys who, after all, just learned she was a Shifter and is just learning her powers.

There ought to be a bigger reason. Has she inherited some big powers? Does she have some great power because she's the only female Shifter? Is she the heir to some powerful position?

Her being the only female is a great thing to expand on. You can do anything with it (within logical reason) because she is the only one. I just want a better explination of why Frederick wants her dead.

Alright, the only other thing I have an issue with is her "round". She had no previous field training to allow her to do this alone. And she did it so easily and flawlessly. It seems like she should have been out watching these guys on rounds a few times, and making sorry attempts herself before being able to kill so effortlessly.

Well that's it. It really was a good chapter, don't be put off by all my nit-picking. You have a growing talent for writing, and I'm loving watching this story unfold. Keep it up!

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Hiya Spitfire! Sorry for the reviewing delay! I was around a friend's and didn't want to do it on my phone! :P

The first thing that jumped out at me, while reading, was this bit:
“Tell me; what ails you, my child?”

“I am having thoughts of murder.”

The priest leaned his face closer to the screen. “Do you truly wish to act on these... thoughts? Is it truly in your desires to kill someone?”

“Oh, but you misunderstand me, Father,” I said in my most innocent tone, “I wish to kill demons, not humans.”

“Demons?” he croaked. (See below)

“Why yes. In fact,” I dropped the innocent tone in my voice, “I intend to send you back to the hell right now!” My dagger pierced the wired screen (See below) and imbedded itself in his face. Makes it sound like the dagger's doing this all itself. Magic dagger!

The demon didn’t scream, having died instantly. Removing my dagger, I let its human form lean limply against the confessional’s wall. Repulsively (see below), I reached down just enough to wipe the black blood off of my dagger and on the demon’s head. Once clean to my satisfaction, I placed it back in its sheath at my thigh. Then I grabbed the glass vial attached at my belt, uncapped it and extended my hand through the holed screen to let one single drop fall onto the corpse. Recapping it immediately, I watched the body slowly disintegrate, as if eaten by some invisible termites. Within seconds, the body had completely disappeared, along with the blood that had splattered on the confessional’s walls, floor and my arm. (See below) I sighed, happy to have no more yucky blood on me.

Fist thought: It pierced the wire so easily? That's either one sharp blade or the wire's made from butter. How many attempts until the dagger got through? This is the wire I was imagining. I think it would take a few hard blows to get through. Meanwhile the priest would realise she's after him and would scream/attempt to escape in the time it took her to get through. Am I making sense?
Second: How is she so sure he's a demon? Yes, the Masters said, but what if they got it wrong? Aren't there any doubts in her mind? Yes, he seems startled when she says she's killing demons, but that still doesn't prove much. Just that like anyone in his position, he could be thinking: "My luck. Trapped with two psychos and no one else is here." Or something like that. But the croak proves nothing! :P
Repulsively She thinks what she's doing is repulsive? Finally? Or do you man she was repulsed? If it's the second, replace "ly" with "ed"
Massive, highlighted section: I think this bit is so cool! And later on when she's like "do you have a death wish" and you explain more about this potion.
Major, screaming, other thing: HOW IS SHE FEELING? Yes, you have "repulsed" and "happy", but other than that there is a bit of a lack of emotion in such a vital scene. ): This is her first mission, round, whatever, but it feels more like she's been doing it for a while. How does she feel before the confessional? She's her usual cryptic self, which I felt was odd. Wouldn't she be slightly anxious? Or angry? Or ..something? And bodily reactions! When the priest/demon heads to the confessional does her heart do a little kick? When she reaches for the vial are her hands shaking? At the moment she feels a little robotic to me here...

As for the rest of the chapter! Loved it. ;D Love CJ's reappearance, I'd been wondering what had happened to her, and the circumstances of it. And the revelation at the end! :O! Huh, I didn't see the two last lines on my phone. It made me chuckle. Poor Crys.
He had mixed emotions crossing his features; one minute angry, the next sad. “He has this idea that you’re this...this... I don’t know! Some all powerful being or something!”
Ha ha. Poor Tony too. ..While I'm on this quote, may I say his dialogue is brilliant in the portrayal of his emotions.

Well, um, that's the end of my colourful review. I apologise if there are any disgraceful typos, some of the letters on my keypad refuse to work. Little monsters.

Gimme a shout when you put up the next chapter!

~Emma
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Argh! The others have already done the nitpicking for me. Maybe I should check in more often... :/ Anyway, I loved this chapter! Especially the part about CJ and Crys... that part made me laugh like crazy! like borntobeawriter said, "Traitor Friend! XD Whoo! You're doing a great job! Keep rocking!
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crap, crap, crap! I'm rereading all your comments to see where I might have been going with my thoughts.

Up there I wrote 'that we'd spoken of it this morning'. Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!




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Haha. Tanya, you make me chuckle. You won't remember what you've said until you read the killer bit with the twist you'd figured out. ...And then it'll all come back to you...

That's just life, my friend. C:

Although, Suz, when do you plan to reveal it...? I want to know, toooo!

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Thanks for the help, Emma. Maybe we can both convince her !




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Imma just asking for a random chapter number... Okay, maybe that's a bit precise... haha (:
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Actually, I can tell you. The big twist is at the before last chapter of the book :D
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